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  1. Good

    I don't have a bass or play bass either, Pete. But, many of my tunes have killer bass lines because I have bass sounds and I am the King of Keyboard Bass! <heh-heh> But, if you really want to use your guitar as a bass in Garageband, this tells you how. https://www.macworld.com/article/1134273/software-graphics/tco-garageband.html
  2. January 2018 Song Contest

    "Because You Are" Just a simple, pure love song - my only one. Me with fellow Muser "M57" on piano. * On the music player, click on the icon of a musical note with lines to the right of it to bring up the lyric. https://www.hobosage.com/because-you-are
  3. Customary curtesy

    Isn't this when someone is supposed to point out that as of yet there's no voting for the 2017 song of the year and 1+1 of the year? Oops! Maybe someone just did. P.S. Someone might also point out that "curtesy" and "courtesy" are very different things. <heh-heh>
  4. Meter Matters!

    Just some of my songs? <heh-heh> Happy New Year, Mike.
  5. Key Analysis

    To my ears, it's in the Key of Cobain, and I think it sounds damn cool. Don't discount a pearly jammin' opening for this on acoustic before the electrics kick in.
  6. I have no point to make, other than it's good to see you back here, Lazz.
  7. Used

    There are many decent DAWS. But, what I think you really need to up your production game are other sounds in your arrangements. You can go ahead and play your guitar great. You can go ahead and sing great. And, you can record both great. But, as long as it's just tracks of voice and guitar, it's going to sound like a "demo." Take this song. It's aching for drums and a funky bass line. [I also think it needs to be longer to be a fully-satisfying song.] There are kids all over the world who don't even know how to play a musical instrument who are making killer-sounding recordings of interesting arrangements on their tablets. They don't have your talent. But, their stuff sounds great. In trying to get the attention of Joe Blow Music Biz, their stuff competes with yours. Think about it. Just my opinions. P.S. Audacity is truly free of charge. But, Reaper is only "free" if you lack the integrity and honor to pay the nominal fee after your free evaluation period ends.
  8. Meter Matters!

    5. A song is a series of patterns The verses must also follow the same pattern as each other because they will be set to the same music as each other. While I agree with much of what you said, I could not more strongly disagree with the above rigid mindset, and I can't tell you how many songs I have that prove this wrong - at least for me. FWIW, below I've pasted a copy of a post of mine from another forum I participate in. Though many songwriters recognize how beneficial it can be to a song to "build" the sound of a song's second verse from the first verse, and while it's fairly common practice to build the sound of a song's second verse with additional instruments coming into the arrangement, I think an underappreciated opportunity in building a second verse is by changing the meter/wordiness of the lyric and/or the rhyme scheme, and/or by significantly changing the vocal melody. This is something I often do with my songs, and though a "lyricist" might have issues with my printed lyric, I challenge anyone to tell me it "doesn't work" for my songs when they hear me do it. And, there's a reason why I do it. I often intentionally change the lyric structure and vocal melody for second verses, because the singer part me as a musician (I'll explain that a bit more later) feels compelled to do it. The lead vocal in a song is literally a "lead instrument" track in the arrangement - the musical instrument being one's voice, as opposed to a guitar or sax or other instrument. Verses in songs are typically musical sections that are repeated. While bringing new musical instruments to the arrangement does "build" the sound of a second verse from the first verse and thus, keeps the song evolving as it goes, if the second verse lyric is sung just like the first lyric is - with the same cadence/wordiness, same rhyme scheme and the same vocal melody/notes, then it's analogous to an instrumental with a lead guitar or lead sax where the second verse lead line is just a cookie-cutter copy of the lead line during the first verse. As a musician, I would never play the same exact lead line in both the first verse and second verse sections - I mean - z-z-z-z-z-z-z. The musician in me makes me feel the same way when, as a singer and lyricist, I want to "build" the sound of the second verse from the first; I feel I need to do it with not just the arrangement for the music bed, but with how I sing the lyric for a second verse too - and that mindset not only directly affects the notes I want to sing for the second verse, but it also informs the specific words for the second verse lyric so as to allow me to sing it that way. I think there are many songwriters - both amateur and pro, and especially those aren't that musically inclined or who do lyrics first - who really don't appreciate what opportunities there are for building the sound of a song as it progresses if they would just be more open to exploring the possibilities awaiting them just outside the closed mindset that a second verse lyric and vocal should sound and "flow" pretty much like they do in the first verse.
  9. I'm Done

    Your tweaks have left the last two lines of the first verse section's second stanza as lines that don't rhyme with each other. Given the last two lines in every other verse stanza do rhyme with each other, I think these non-rhyming lines in this stanza will sound like a conspicuous omission of rhyme. Also, though "nightmare" and "beware" technically do rhyme with each other in those two lines, the natural emphasis is on the first syllable in "nightmare," while in "beware" it's on the second syllable. So, unless one of those words is sung with an unnatural emphasis, it won't sound like a strong rhyme, and an unnatural emphasis won't sound "right" either. So, you may want to consider that as well. I also think the chorus would be stronger if you didn't use "around" before the hook line and only used it in the hook line. I'll suggest something like this: I'm done done with the thrill of the chase I'm done done with just another pretty face I'm done, I'm really done until the next one comes around
  10. How can we improve the site?

    An open bar would be appreciated.
  11. "Timed" song contests

    FWIW, I have instrumentals I'd post for some kind of "thing." But, doing one just for this per some kind of "brief" or time limit? I'll pass. P.S. One to two months isn't a "deadline," it's an eternity.
  12. I Ain't No Angel

    You may not be an angel . . . yet, but give it some time, because it sure sounds to me like you're "knockin' on heaven's door."
  13. Forever Loved

    FWIW, I think you make a poor creative choice singing the hook as you do - spacing things out in a robotic and odd-sounding "for . . . ever . . . loved." To me, that kind of delivery also makes the sentiment expressed sound less than sincere. I think if you started "your'e" a just a hair earlier and held it a tad, then held the "for" a wee bit before going to "ever loved", it would sound a lot better. By holding "you're" and "for" a wee bit you'd also emphasize that as a rhyme within the line, and I think that would sound cool. Just my opinion. David
  14. Shame

    Hmm. I like that you're using the Hebrew meaning of your first name, and so, I think you should do the same with your middle name, Since "David" means "beloved," I think the fourth line would be better as "beloved in your heart?" In my opinion, the first lines and especially the third lines of the verses hurt the song. Maybe your earthly father gave you your name long before you were born, but god didn't if this is to god, at least not directly, and no person and no god, either directly or indirectly, showed you who to be or spoke to you and imparted information to you that you understood while you were in your mother's womb. Would even the most devoutly religious person think such a thing? I confess that, in general, I find many religious claims to be ridiculous. But the claims in those lines here come across as especially ludicrous to me in their current form, and that's regardless of whether this is religious or non-religious.
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