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  1. BLUE PENCIL

    Hey everyone, thank you all for your comments. I apologize for not responding sooner but I’ve been tied up with some family things that need pretty constant attention. Some really great feedback and good suggestion offered and I greatly appreciate everyone taking the time to listen and comment. I’ll try to respond individual when things settle down here, hopefully soon. But again, a big thank you to everyone for their input.
  2. She Lied

    She told me all her loving she was saving for me - she's saving up for me But then i saw her cheating in an S.U.V. - might be cool to say the suv was rocking/bpuncing if you could work that in. Good rock lyric. Yup, country is where all the rock and roll has moved to. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QV-eTFXazKc
  3. From the LA Times: Rock legend Eric Clapton has admitted that he’s struggling with hearing loss, according to a new interview with the BBC. Clapton said that the issue is one of several maladies he’s dealing with as he continues to tour into his 70s. “I mean, I'm going deaf, I've got tinnitus, my hands just about work,” he said. “I'm hoping that people will come along and see me just because, or maybe more than because, I'm a curiosity. I know that is part of it, because it's amazing to myself I'm still here.” Though the guitarist, 72, still sounded as sharp as ever on his 2016 album “I Still Do,” he has said that eczema, among other challenges, have made it more difficult to perform at his best. The Times’ Mikael Wood said of Clapton’s September show at the Forum: “Beyond those pragmatic concerns, though, he seemed almost blissfully undriven as he moved through a set meant to encapsulate his half-century in music .… Clapton seemed to reach some kind of zen state that rendered his ambitions and his calculations irrelevant; he was playing because playing is what he does.” In a new documentary, “Eric Clapton: Life in 12 Bars,” Clapton also recalls his decades-long battle with alcohol abuse. He told the BBC that the movie shows that “there's light at the end of the tunnel .… I think it's important to see that it's a happy ending, it's like a redemption concept. If you're going to go and see it, be prepared for a heavy ride."
  4. Naked Santa

    Hi Kuya, Thought this was a well written and funny holiday lyric. With the right music and production I think you might have a perennial Xmas tune.
  5. Kind of a blue-grassy-Americana song. Blue Pencil ©2017 Gary Hale BLUE PENCIL V If I had a blue pencil I’d write a blue letter ‘Cause blue is the color of my heart If I had a blue pencil I’d draw a blue picture So you‘d see how blue I feel when we’re apart V If I had a blue pencil I’d color my teardrops With the saddest shade of blue I could find If I had a blue pencil The whole world would be blue ‘Til you were back here by my side CHORUS Every day that rainbow falls lower in the sky Every second that I’m missing you Every night when I dream, when I close my eyes All I see is blue V If I had a blue pencil I’d write a blue love song I would sing it every night and day If I had a blue pencil I’d draw a blue airplane And wish that all my blues would fly away CHORUS Every day that rainbow falls lower in the sky Every second that I’m missing you Every night when I dream, when I close my eyes All I see is blue V If I had a blue pencil I’d write a blue love song I would sing it every night and day If I had a blue pencil I’d draw a blue airplane And wish that all my blues would fly away
  6. Blue Pencil

    I'm posting it in the song section. Be interested if you still feel the same. Thanks for reading and commenting. Thanks, Jim. You'll be able to hear the melody a little latter today in the song section. Thanks, LB. Happy you enjoyed it. Thanks, Paul. I appreciate the kind words. Ha! That could be dangerous! Appreciate the read. Hi, Kuya. I understand your comment but I do disagree. I think it sings well and the chorus makes a point within the context of the song. Thanks for adding to the discussion.
  7. Blue Pencil

    POSTING IN SONG SECTION FOR LISTENING 1/9/18 Blue Pencil ©2017 Gary Hale V If I had a blue pencil I’d write a blue letter ‘Cause blue is the color of my heart If I had a blue pencil I’d draw a blue picture So you‘d see how blue I feel when we’re apart V If I had a blue pencil I’d color my teardrops With the saddest shade of blue I could find If I had a blue pencil The whole world would be blue ‘Til you were back here by my side CHORUS Every day that rainbow falls lower in the sky Every second that I’m missing you Every night when I dream, when I close my eyes All I see is blue V If I had a blue pencil I’d write a blue love song I would sing it every night and day If I had a blue pencil I’d draw a blue airplane And wish that all my blues would fly away CHORUS Every day that rainbow falls lower in the sky Every second that I’m missing you Every night when I dream, when I close my eyes All I see is blue V If I had a blue pencil I’d write a blue love song I would sing it every night and day If I had a blue pencil I’d draw a blue airplane And wish that all my blues would fly away
  8. Permanent

    What a great line! Paints an entire picture.
  9. A Plea from Your Heart

    That's a good point. I should have been specific. In retrospect, and after reading over again a couple of times, this has started to grow on me and maybe I'm beginning to "get it." I think what I was reacting to was the actual "plea" in the chorus. It struck me as almost too direct, without any subtlety. But that is precisely what you are going for... yes? So I would say that you have taken your idea and created a lyric that successfully communicates what you set out to do. I was actually thinking more along the lines of a folk ballad, not a country party song.
  10. YOU WIN

    Hi FrankeeLee, Pretty powerful lyric and a really strong chorus that delivers. Particular like the repeated "you" in the chorus. Wonderful lines!
  11. A Plea from Your Heart

    Paul, I had a hard time making the leap to a pleading heart in this lyric. While the intent of the lyric is clear it just didn’t translate lyrically to me. The pathos seemed a bit heavy handed and overwrought. And the 3rd verse, where the heart talks about what’s going on in your mind, that didn’t work at all for me. I know how hard it is to shift gear when a writer is committed to a lyric, hook and idea that they love and have spent time developing. Now, on the other hand, if you went in a different direction and titled this “Talking Heart Blues” and made it a bit lighter it would give you the opportunity to develop this idea more completely while still getting the message across, perhaps in a fuller way.
  12. The madman and the lover

    I agree with what's already been said. It's a good write but the rhyme scheme does tend to work against it and starts to diminish the narrative.. If you're up to it you might want to consider changing the AABBCC. I think your concept is strong and the story is interesting and maybe it's worth experimenting with.
  13. December Lyrics Contest

    Wow! Thank you all for voting and getting a kick out of this lyric. Congrats to SpanishBuddah and JoeinJAx, as well as all of the writers who entered. Tee and I really wanted to write something that had an original hook, hick-hop sections and a “gotta dance” feel to it and we’re both happy with what we came up with and we’re really glad it translated to the page. Terrific group of lyrics this month. (I have to single out Eric’s lyric for its sheer uniqueness and daunting subject - Physics! Can’t quite figure out how it would sing but it surely reflects a lot of time and thought was put in.) I really enjoyed a lot of the lyrics this month including JoeinJAx, SpanishBuddah and the writer of Part time Lover, among them. Again, thank you all for liking Barroom Rodeo. And as always a big thanks to Iggy for his time and efforts in keeping these contests going strong.
  14. AMERICAN SONGWRITER WINNER

    Peter, very kind words from a writer I highly respect. Thank you.
  15. Strange and Beatiful

    It’s an interesting contrast between the use of archaic words and the internet to illustrate two worlds colliding and merging. As if a time traveler from the past was thrust into the modern world and became intoxicated by the unlimited possibilities that beckoned. Certainly an ambitious portrait of imprisoned desires seeking to find their outlet.
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