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  1. Hi all, Working a song idea. Its a cryptic song, I know. Feedback welcome. GHOST OF YOUR PAST (Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton) It’s the same apparition Coming back To warn of the future With a flashback It, spooks, and, scares, you It, knows, just, how, to Exploit, your, weakness And, your, help…, less…, ness You, can’t, escape, from The ghost of your past Like a phantom limb The ghost of your past The ghost of your past The ghost of your past Now a big storm is formin’ In your mind The past has escaped you Can’t be confined You, should, have, lis…, tened Your, doom’s, now, chris…, tened Ign…, nored, your, weak…, ness Now, you, are, help…, less You, can’t, escape, from The ghost of your past Like a phantom limb The ghost of your past The ghost of your past The ghost of your past
  2. Hi there, I will comment mostly on the song and not the recording/production as I guess this is what you want mostly: I normally try to minimize the amount of lyrics "bombarding you" so you have time to "digest them", but this really works here. Alot of lyrics but very comprehensible and fits well. I like the overall feel - like a story teller. Good job! Vocals are also well sung. Also a good with making a song with very few chords not sound boring - all to do with the "storyteller" feel. Again, good job! Only suggestion to improve is to try to very the vocals in the last verse and chorus - maybe at some grit into the vocals. Then again, you may loose the feel of the song - something to try. Keep at it - really like the song. I am guessing this was played and recorded live. I think you should try recording a more polished production with two guitars panned L & R, some percussion maybe (a la Tears in Heaven). Maybe also some short solos/guitar overlays before each verse (again a la Tears in Heaven)
  3. Hi, Rebooted a dormant song from 3 years ago. I’m a better song writer, arranger, mixer and musician now, so I decided to have another go at it. Plus, I wanted to really play the solo instead of using Shredder 2! Feedback welcome: https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/right-thing-v1 JONATHAN LINTON – THE RIGHT THING (Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton) Circumstance is so unkind The wrong place at the right time You know it all, you’re intertwined A moral decision consumes your mind Those that know, got you in their sight No escape from the helpless plight Angel on the left shoulder, devil on right Damned if you’re wrong, damned if you’re right Good deeds didn’t prepare you for this Innocence gone, give it one last kiss The righteous path won’t pull you though Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do The dark side it sucks you in Innocence lost, the ultimate sin The path of light won’t pull you though Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do High in their pulpit they preach to us Holier then thou, in their words we trust And then they’re caught in a boyish lust Hushed by the leaders, it’s so unjust How can they judge, how can they condemn Self preservation’s built in all men They’d do the same if it happened to them Moral decision won’t help you then Good deeds didn’t prepare you for this Innocence gone, give it one last kiss The righteous path won’t pull you though Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do The dark side it sucks you in Innocence lost, the ultimate sin The path of light won’t pull you though Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do Urrrghhh!
  4. Doom Porn (Language)

    Really cool song! Mix is really good too, but here are some comments on how to make it better: - I would lower the E-Piano in the mix like 3dB - it is too dominant to me - I would re-adjust the drum mix and lower the hihat and bring up the kick and snare - Like other say, the delay/reverb is making the vocals a little hard to understand. Plus sounds like some EQ and compression would make the vocals stand out more. I know that heavy reverb and delay gives that 70s feel and it definitely fits, but would low pass the shit out of the reverb and delay (cut everything below 1K, maybe even lower) so that they do not clash with the main vocals. They I would try some EQ and compression - maybe boosts above 5K, maybe 2 or 3 levels of EQ, using a 2A compressor at the last stage. I am no expert, but that is my humble advice. Guitar is really good!
  5. Life Goes On

    Great production. I have also to agree with the others the two chords get boring after a while. But the production is very good. Piano fit perfectly, not too much and good dynamics. Vocals fit very well and well sung. Only thing is the bass - could be a bit more present to me - maybe that's just my taste. I do like the breakdown in the middle though - that adds something to the song. Why don't you try to add in a bridge part? I think that will spice up the song alot. More suggestions (just suggestions, maybe it doesn't fit with how you want to produce the song): - Towards the end, try singing "life goes on etc." with backup vocals in answer to the main vocals (so: "Life goes on (lead vocals).....then: "Life goes on" (backup vocals with alot of layers and panned hard L & R for a rich sound) - Towards the end try "Joe Cocker" type vocals at a higher octave The above could also help break the monotony. Good stuff - keep it up!
  6. Wrote a song idea with 3/4 timing and would highly appreciate feedback before I develop it further and eventually write lyrics. Going for a Soundgarden feel - not sure if I pulled it off. https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/freedom-of-expression
  7. Sea Of Shame

    Hi all, Working on a Soundgarden style song and wrote some lyrics. The lyrics are very cryptic I know. Feedback welcome. SEA OF SHAME (Words by Jonathan Linton) Only got yourself to blame Drowning in your sea of shame Seems they found the hidden wreck Now it’s all hands on the deck The ship is sinking The crew is shrinking The truth is stinking And your immersed…in your…sea of shame When you’re alone with your mind Does your conscience come out to fight In the night And does your conscience tell the truth Do you hide right from wrong But how long Crocodile you lay in wait Falling guy takes the bait Prey caught to take the blame Drowned in your sea of shame Soul your trading Lies cascading Madly wading Now he’s immersed…in your sea of shame When you’re alone with your mind Does your conscience come out to fight In the night And does your conscience tell the truth Do you hide right from wrong But how long SOLO When you’re alone with your mind Does your conscience come out to fight In the night And does your conscience tell the truth Do you hide right from wrong But how long Only got yourself to blame Drowning in your sea of shame
  8. Hi all,I am looking for a guitarist to lay down a replacement solo for the song below. Ideally it is completed different and bears no trace of the original.https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/childrens-home-20150418I want to re-record and remix the song - I am a little smarter and better at recording and singing now. I would love to have a new solo laid down for it.
  9. New Rough Rock Song Idea

    Hi there, Thanks for the feedback. Have some initial ideas for lyrics - recorded them quickly. Not my best performance and still not 100% happy. Feedback welcome: FEARLESS UNAFRAID (Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton) A leap of faith I take It’s too late To procrastinate Dreams and fears are packed Wheels hit tarmac There’s no going back One foot, in front of the other There’s a whole world to discover Future’s not certain for me But I move on Fearless unfraid Master of my destiny So I move on Fearless unfraid I’m movin’ on, fearless unfraid I’m movin’ on, fearless unfraid I’m movin’ on, fearless unfraid I’m movin’ on….fearless….un…afraid Like Doctor Livingstone I face the unknown Leave the comfort zone Courage that cannot fade I’m not afraid Of the choice I made One foot, infront of the other There’s a whole world to discover Future’s not certain for me But I move on Fearless unfraid Master of my destiny So I move on Fearless unfraid I’m movin’ on, fearless unfraid I’m movin’ on, fearless unfraid I’m movin’ on, fearless unfraid I’m movin’ on….fearless….un…afraid
  10. Gotta make you mine

    Hi there, The basic song idea has potential. Good start. Here is my critique: - Production could be improved. Drums can be mixed better - hihat is very up front, the rest is buried, also can be mixed better - it sounds like the drums are straight out the box of (e.g. more room sound, plugin on each drum part, paral comp) - The song drags on - gets a little boring - some ideas to add more dynamics are like changing to a more distorted tone (like when you say "working all night", adding a guitar lead part ontop for the chorus (like Man In The Box intro just before the first verse for example), changing to a crash cymbal for the chorus instead of hi-hat, take of the radio effect and sing an octave higher or harmonies for the chorus (like you do at the end), adding a second guitar one octave higher at places. - The guitar tone is not doing it for me. I would try different tones or try EQ-ing Please do not take this feedback too harsh - just trying to help out.
  11. Hi all, Came up with this song idea and would appreciate feedback before I continue and write lyrics. https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/song-idea-80
  12. New rough song idea - still work in progress - only one verse written. Feedback welcome:https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/pile-of-gritPILE OF GRIT(Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton)Walls are closin’ inYou’re in a tail spinGot what you wantBut you didn’t winPlayed a game of chessTrying to impressPaid no attention toSigns of distressIt’s VindicationYour retributionA condemnationYour restitutionYou hypocriteYou’re counterfeitBeen found unfitYou dug the pit, now!You’re in a pile of….gitYou’re in a pile of gitYou’re in a pile of….gitYou’re in a pile of git
  13. Hi all, Please provide critique on this song idea: JONATHAN LINTON – GREEDY STREET (Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton) New York is the battlefront Lust for wealth, they’re on the hunt No emotion’s a needed skill Three-piece suits, they’re dressed to kill The-word is-not enough for them Yeah-yeah-yeah, its down on wall street Yeah-yeah-ye-ii-yeah, its down on greedy street Yeah-yeah-yeah, its down on wall street Yeah-yeah-ye-ii-yeah, its down on greedy street Clean or dirty money, they don’t care ‘Long as they they get their dirty share Retired savings on an ego trip Gambled away like a poker chip The-word is-not enough for them Yeah-yeah-yeah, its down on wall street Yeah-yeah-ye-ii-yeah, its down on greedy street Yeah-yeah-yeah, its down on wall street Yeah-yeah-ye-ii-yeah, its down on greedy street SOLO Yeah-yeah-yeah, its down on wall street Yeah-yeah-ye-ii-yeah, its down on greedy street Yeah-yeah-yeah, its down on wall street Yeah-yeah-ye-ii-yeah, its down on greedy street
  14. New Demo "Mrs Brown"

    Hi there, Nice tune! I think the intro is too long. The vocals need a bit of work - I put more power and breathing control (I have the same problem by the way!). The song also gets boring after I while tpp, I think you need more variation. Maybe put the bridge in more, maybe add a break before the bridge and the chorus, or add a different strumming type.
  15. 2 candles

    Hi there, Really liked this tune. Alot going on, different instruments coming in, and all fit well together. Regarding the lyrics, my only critique is I would try to minimize the lyrics - with lyrics, less is more. A prime example I like is "Man In the Box" by AIC - virtually no lyrics. The more lyrics you have, the less the listener can obsorb. Some examples of where you could minimize the lyrics without changing the context are: Two candles, burned in their chambers, connected by a small door One chamber, blinded and dark, it´s candle the only light The other chamber had windows, brought daylight in the room Sometime reducing the syllables helps also. This took me a while to work into my lyrics and to fine less words to say the same thing, Hope this helps. Keep at it!
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