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jonlint

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  1. Hi all,I am looking for a guitarist to lay down a replacement solo for the song below. Ideally it is completed different and bears no trace of the original.https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/childrens-home-20150418I want to re-record and remix the song - I am a little smarter and better at recording and singing now. I would love to have a new solo laid down for it.
  2. Hi there, Thanks for the feedback. Have some initial ideas for lyrics - recorded them quickly. Not my best performance and still not 100% happy. Feedback welcome: FEARLESS UNAFRAID (Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton) A leap of faith I take It’s too late To procrastinate Dreams and fears are packed Wheels hit tarmac There’s no going back One foot, in front of the other There’s a whole world to discover Future’s not certain for me But I move on Fearless unfraid Master of my destiny So I move on Fearless unfraid I’m movin’ on, fearless unfraid I’m movin’ on, fearless unfraid I’m movin’ on, fearless unfraid I’m movin’ on….fearless….un…afraid Like Doctor Livingstone I face the unknown Leave the comfort zone Courage that cannot fade I’m not afraid Of the choice I made One foot, infront of the other There’s a whole world to discover Future’s not certain for me But I move on Fearless unfraid Master of my destiny So I move on Fearless unfraid I’m movin’ on, fearless unfraid I’m movin’ on, fearless unfraid I’m movin’ on, fearless unfraid I’m movin’ on….fearless….un…afraid
  3. Hi there, The basic song idea has potential. Good start. Here is my critique: - Production could be improved. Drums can be mixed better - hihat is very up front, the rest is buried, also can be mixed better - it sounds like the drums are straight out the box of (e.g. more room sound, plugin on each drum part, paral comp) - The song drags on - gets a little boring - some ideas to add more dynamics are like changing to a more distorted tone (like when you say "working all night", adding a guitar lead part ontop for the chorus (like Man In The Box intro just before the first verse for example), changing to a crash cymbal for the chorus instead of hi-hat, take of the radio effect and sing an octave higher or harmonies for the chorus (like you do at the end), adding a second guitar one octave higher at places. - The guitar tone is not doing it for me. I would try different tones or try EQ-ing Please do not take this feedback too harsh - just trying to help out.
  4. Hi there, Very cool song - exactly my taste in song writing. Also as "Alice In Chains" is my favourite band you check that box too! Vocals are really great! Production is very very good. Interested in hearing some insights into this - the DAW, drums, mixing approach, mastering approach, vocal mixing, etc. Now for the feedback: - I would add some harmonies - the song can take it well - The song is quite long - does drag on after a while, although you do break it up alot - I would reconsider how you sing the "Natural Wild" part - could take a scream or a higher octave to make it stand out - also I would also try repeating it. - The distorted guitars sound a little thin to my ears. What are you using there? I would suggest quad tracking or using a real amp. On the other hand you frickin' nailed the clean guitars.
  5. Hi all, Came up with this song idea and would appreciate feedback before I continue and write lyrics. https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/song-idea-80
  6. New rough song idea - still work in progress - only one verse written. Feedback welcome:https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/pile-of-gritPILE OF GRIT(Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton)Walls are closin’ inYou’re in a tail spinGot what you wantBut you didn’t winPlayed a game of chessTrying to impressPaid no attention toSigns of distressIt’s VindicationYour retributionA condemnationYour restitutionYou hypocriteYou’re counterfeitBeen found unfitYou dug the pit, now!You’re in a pile of….gitYou’re in a pile of gitYou’re in a pile of….gitYou’re in a pile of git
  7. Hi all, Please provide critique on this song idea: JONATHAN LINTON – GREEDY STREET (Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton) New York is the battlefront Lust for wealth, they’re on the hunt No emotion’s a needed skill Three-piece suits, they’re dressed to kill The-word is-not enough for them Yeah-yeah-yeah, its down on wall street Yeah-yeah-ye-ii-yeah, its down on greedy street Yeah-yeah-yeah, its down on wall street Yeah-yeah-ye-ii-yeah, its down on greedy street Clean or dirty money, they don’t care ‘Long as they they get their dirty share Retired savings on an ego trip Gambled away like a poker chip The-word is-not enough for them Yeah-yeah-yeah, its down on wall street Yeah-yeah-ye-ii-yeah, its down on greedy street Yeah-yeah-yeah, its down on wall street Yeah-yeah-ye-ii-yeah, its down on greedy street SOLO Yeah-yeah-yeah, its down on wall street Yeah-yeah-ye-ii-yeah, its down on greedy street Yeah-yeah-yeah, its down on wall street Yeah-yeah-ye-ii-yeah, its down on greedy street
  8. Hi there, Nice tune! I think the intro is too long. The vocals need a bit of work - I put more power and breathing control (I have the same problem by the way!). The song also gets boring after I while tpp, I think you need more variation. Maybe put the bridge in more, maybe add a break before the bridge and the chorus, or add a different strumming type.
  9. Hi there, Really liked this tune. Alot going on, different instruments coming in, and all fit well together. Regarding the lyrics, my only critique is I would try to minimize the lyrics - with lyrics, less is more. A prime example I like is "Man In the Box" by AIC - virtually no lyrics. The more lyrics you have, the less the listener can obsorb. Some examples of where you could minimize the lyrics without changing the context are: Two candles, burned in their chambers, connected by a small door One chamber, blinded and dark, it´s candle the only light The other chamber had windows, brought daylight in the room Sometime reducing the syllables helps also. This took me a while to work into my lyrics and to fine less words to say the same thing, Hope this helps. Keep at it!
  10. Noted - my apologies.
  11. Hi all, I am working on a new song idea - this one is just an instrumental for now. Critique is welcome:
  12. Hi all, Working on a new song idea. Lyrics and soundcloud link are below. The drums are EZ Drummer 2, DAW is Reaper, vocals are all by me, Guitar is a PRS copy played through a Zoom G3 with an ENGL amp sim, solo is a placeholder as I am not a solo guitarist. I plan to add a proper solo later. Bass is MIDI using Trilian. Critic on the song and mix so far are most welcome: JONATHAN LINTON – POWER ADDICTION (Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton) A little taste has gone to your head Now your hunger can’t be fed You’ve changed, everyone can see All because of dependency There’s no denying No sense trying You’re a victim of power addiction Subdivision, acquisition You’re obsessed with power addiction Inquisition, demolition Lost your soul to power addiction The Prognosis is bleak and black Once an asshole, there’s no going back Like a drug, if you abuse You’ll overdose on the power you use There’s no denying No sense trying You’re a victim of power addiction Subdivision, acquisition You’re obsessed with power addiction Inquisition, demolition Lost your soul to power addiction SOLO Subdivision, acquisition You’re obsessed with power addiction Inquisition, demolition Lost your soul to power addiction Unforgiven, the attrition You’ll burn in hell from power addiction
  13. Hi there Mike B, Sorry to say, but the song does not grap me too well and the slow part, while it is a good general idea, doesn't quite fit. I will not comment on the mix quality as I guess it is a demo for the song idea. Sorry to be brutal dude, but I also have alot of songs I think are killer and others say don't grap them enough. Maybe try working on the song some more or try adding or changing the riffs.
  14. The song is really cool. The recording quality can be improved, but I am guessing this is a demo, so I will not focus on this. The vocals in general are really great but a little off key in places - I would work on those. I like the way you did the harmonies too. Also like the solo and fill work - its really fits well and very expressive - not too overdone like so much crap out there. Lyrics are fine to me and love the dynamics! Work on a clean mastered version and you have a killer tune!