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fabkebab

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fabkebab last won the day on March 31

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About fabkebab

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    Ahh a newbie no longer
  • Birthday 20/12/69

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    http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=107236

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    Houston, Texas
  • Interests
    Fatherhood, Songwriting/performing, the mystery of "on stage charisma", The wide world, Gardening, People, Sports, trying to "get" America

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    both
  • Musical Influences?
    Traditional Folk, Progressive Rock, plus some classical, acoustic, metal, pop, country, reggae

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  1. I listened to this a couple of times, and it is awesome!! I remember the lyric from a recent competition, and I was curious to see what you had done with it. I think the song was straight and exactly what I imagined it would be up until 1:10 and you walloped me with your bridge - really effective, and the transition chord back into the verse was inspired!! You then took it somewhere new again at 2.00, with a new chord and a swinging finish - I just really enjoyed it from start to finish! Solid, solid effort :-)
  2. Hi all - this is a bluegrass re-imagining of a poem by Lao Tzu (604-521 b.c.) The Dry Man is born soft and supple, but on his deathbed stiff he'll lie And living plants once green and tender in a vase grow brittle and dry Those old rigid branches represent the soul of death And those who stay soft and yielding encapsulate life's gentle breath Cos when the wind grows ever stronger and life is turned on its head The dried out trunks of the dead will break, leaving the living instead
  3. I listened to this a couple of times Neat song - you very effectively captured the 60s sound with a song that stays interesting throughtout. I must say there is something which sounds horribly out of tune - I think it is the main bass lick during the verses - perhaps is intentionally discordant - everything else sits nicely so i am wondering if you put it in deliberately?
  4. I found this song kind of charming - There was a childlike, maybe deceptive simplicity of the whole arangement and vocal treatment which made me smile. I think at least part of the appeal was that the first few of your songs were all about the Chicago cubs, adding this vibe of someone who has a passion for life I cant really offer a deeper critique - I just thought it was neat!
  5. My heart beats for you Chorus If you put your ear close to my heart You will hear it beating for you Yes its beating for you Pounding for you Contracting for you There's goes the beat, beat, beat It's beating for you Every time you come around My soul twitches for you Switch up for you Boy my heart is bleeding for you So come listen to my heart beat It is so, so real Chorus If you put your ear Close to my heart You will hear it beating for you Pounding for you Contracting for you There goes the beat, beat, beat It beats for you I cannot imagine life without you I need you here My love is strong Ain't no taking in this So come feel my heart beat It's going beep, beep, beep I'm not even sure if the sound I swear I'm hallucinating Chorus If you put your ear Close to my heart You will hear it beating for you Yes it's beating for you Pounding for you Contracting for you There goes the beat, beat, beat x3 It beats only for you, yeah.
  6. Suzy Loves Me True Verse 1 I thought it would be over She’d be on the run Like some shadow lover Gone with the morning sun Verse 2 But she’s here beside me Holding to my hand We’re watching the sun rise Over this glorious land Chorus Walking in the surf Water lapping at our feet Sand pipers near the reef Dipping beaks to eat Sun peeking in the eastern sky Lighting a world of blue I see the way she smiles Suzy loves me true Bridge I’ve been gone a year Duty has been rough Love learns to endure As hearts learn to trust Chorus Walking in the surf Water lapping at our feet Sand pipers near the reef Dipping beaks to eat Sun peeking in the eastern sky Lighting a world of blue I see the way she smiles Suzy loves me true Tag I see the way she smiles Yes, Suzy loves me true
  7. Sing Us Both To Heaven Well, you're a thief and I'm a beggar Circling round this love together Each one taking more than we would give Those willing hearts that we once plundered Their broken weight now pulls us under And we have both forgotten how to live Chorus: And if I could I would wrap us up in my guitar And sing us both to heaven I'd sing us both All the way to heaven I'm showing kings but you've got aces Time to pack our sad suitcases Every day's a hand that we should fold We bet on love in all its glory Believing all those made up stories But every day we just keep growing old Chorus: And if I could I would wrap us up in my guitar And sing us both to heaven I'd sing us both All the way to heaven Bridge This avalanche of might have beens has buried us alive How many times has love come round and not been recognized And all those hard decisions that never turned out well We thought they promised heaven but all we found was hell Chorus: And if I could I would wrap us up in my guitar And sing us both to heaven I'd sing us both All the way to heaven
  8. Seriously Grouch? I have been waiting for that tabletop poetry book for a long time!
  9. Head stuck on the boxy gray screen Verse: Mother is sick in bed very next door. The kid leaves an updates instead look - "Please pray for my Mom, she is very sick". Then takes a selfie like a narcissist whore. Verse: There is a deep sickness spreading Which is modern world delivering. Head stuck on the boxy gray screen, Gaining nothing but finger scrolling. Chorus: Addicts are evolving, followers are floating. Communications are Digitalize. Forget a warm hug to feel alive. Bridge: The whole world is open now to share. Too much information is available there. Too easy to get just as easy to forget. No establishment deep inside our mind. Verse: There is a deep sickness spreading Which is modern world delivering. Head stuck on the boxy gray screen, Gaining nothing but finger scrolling. Chorus: Addicts are evolving, followers are floating. Communications are Digitalize. Forget a warm hug to feel alive.
  10. Hello Piano Hello Piano May I sit with you a spell? My mind's been through a lot today But my heart has been though hell Your keys feel so familiar in my hands It's so nice to find you waiting here To comfort an old friend Oh, my Piano That funeral was tough The more I tried to hold my tears The more they wouldn't stop And people searching for a caring word Just echoed "Sorry for your loss" Their eyes fixed on the floor {pre} But you know what I came here for.. {ch} Let's play a song that lifts us far from here That frolics in fond memories, and lives in joyful years We'll leave this sad and senseless day behind For at least a little time At least a little time... {instr} So now, Piano Guess I'll close you now and go Though I'd love to spend forever here There are those I must console You've helped me keep this darkened cloud at bay Consumed me with your magic Just like every time we play So I'll be back here soon, to say.. Hello Piano Let's play a song that lifts us far from here That frolics in fond memories, and lives in joyful years We'll leave this sad and senseless world behind For at least a little time At least a little time
  11. I would do it, but I am doing the lyric competition...
  12. Riding In Different Cars You always let me sing before Your favourite hard core troubadour But I can’t do that anymore Riding in different cars We used to take the grandest tours Now it’s “why’d we even come here for?” I looked so hard through those brochures Now lying in different cars I know you’re somewhere staring out that window Sad and lingering distance in your eyes I try to talk but you’re no longer listening A passenger surrendering to time And even if I thought we tried the very best we could It seems that neither one of us was ever any good Which puts us where we are Riding in different cars Dismay does not describe the things I’m tired of While profanity of chance has not quite left enough But give me time I’ll find our words For riding in different cars Give me time I’ll find our words For riding in different cars Yeah, give me time I’ll find the words For riding in different cars
  13. Vortex of Fire I wake late at night Can't seem to sleep Dripping in sweat This fantasy's deep An image of you Chiseled and tan Stimulates my senses You are the man Cover my body Breathe on my face Hold me down in the passion Hear our hearts race Flex every muscle Kiss these lips of desire I want to feel your power A vortex of fire A vortex A vortex A vortex of fire I run my fingers Through your black hair As heat builds up Eyes lock in a stare You whisper softly Pumping your chest I lick your salty skin That is touching my breast Cover my body Breathe on my face Hold me down in the passion Hear our hearts race Flex every muscle Kiss these lips of desire I want to feel your power A vortex of fire A vortex A vortex A vortex of fire When I fall back to sleep I hope my dream comes true How I wish you were here In bed with me too Cover my body Breathe on my face Hold me down in the passion Hear our hearts race Flex every muscle Kiss these lips of desire I want to feel your power A vortex of fire A vortex A vortex A vortex of fire
  14. Comeback Kid (Intro) What doesn't kill us will make us stronger And I'm battered and bruised, Look into the eyes of any winner They hit the ropes and paid their dues. (Verse 1) I had both my eyes Set on the prize And a heart that'll never fail, But I came up short Of the dream I'd bought Couldn't grasp that holy grail. (Pre Chorus) But I'll come back later and I'll come back stronger And the time that passes won't quell my hunger I'll learn to be a little wiser This was just the appetiser (Chorus) I'll be the COMEBACK KID You better believe My name's on that Trophy Heart's on my sleeve! I'll be the COMEBACK KID Comeback kid My day in the sun I'm gonna earn it! (Verse 2) I had a bad surprise Was cut down to size And the loss was hard to take, Yes, I came up short Of where I'd thought This journey's end would be made. (Pre Chorus) But I'll come back later and I'll come back stronger And the time that passes won't quell my hunger I'll learn to be a little wiser This was just the appetiser (Chorus) I'll be the COMEBACK KID You better believe My name's on that Trophy Heart's on my sleeve! I'll be the COMEBACK KID Comeback kid My day in the sun I'm gonna earn it! (Verse 3) Now reject the lies No more alibis And nothin’ standing in my way, I may have come up short But the lesson's taught Won't repeat mistakes again. (Pre Chorus) Yeah I'll come back later and I'll come back stronger And the time that passes won't quell my hunger I've learnt to be a little wiser That was just the appetiser (Chorus) I'll be the COMEBACK KID You better believe My name's on that Trophy Heart's on my sleeve! I'll be the COMEBACK KID Comeback kid My day in the sun I'm gonna earn it! (Spoken outro – Muhammed Ali quote) ‘Only a man who knows what it is to be defeated can reach down to the bottom of his soul and come up with the extra ounce of power it takes to win when the match is even’.
  15. The wrong stuff 1/ On a park bench at lunchtime It's just you, fresh air and me Seeking some calm In natures company Children with their mothers A a bird is flying by An escape from work Where the pressure is getting very high Ch/ And you're saying I‘m the wrong stuff That I’m weak and I will fail , I’m not good enough And I’m making a mistake Like you want me to break 2/ I was brought up to be different Not to let anyone treat me badly To own my life But it can't be that way sadly You're more than skin deep You're in the heart of me The exception to the rule About giving no time to an enemy Ch/ And you're saying I‘m the wrong stuff That I’m weak and I will fail , I’m not good enough And I’m making a mistake Like you want me to break Br/ Lunch time over, and its back to the grind Hoped that the fresh air would help me unwind But then you showed up and ruined the hour Both hunter and prey talking on in my mind Ch/ And you're saying I‘m the wrong stuff That I’m weak and I will fail , I’m not good enough And I’m making a mistake Like you want me to break