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fabkebab

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fabkebab last won the day on March 31

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About fabkebab

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    Ahh a newbie no longer
  • Birthday 20/12/69

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    http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=107236

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    Houston, Texas
  • Interests
    Fatherhood, Songwriting/performing, the mystery of "on stage charisma", The wide world, Gardening, People, Sports, trying to "get" America

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    both
  • Musical Influences?
    Traditional Folk, Progressive Rock, plus some classical, acoustic, metal, pop, country, reggae

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  1. The wrong stuff 1/ On a park bench at lunchtime It's just you, fresh air and me Seeking some calm In natures company Children with their mothers A a bird is flying by An escape from work Where the pressure is getting very high Ch/ And you're saying I‘m the wrong stuff That I’m weak and I will fail , I’m not good enough And I’m making a mistake Like you want me to break 2/ I was brought up to be different Not to let anyone treat me badly To own my life But it can't be that way sadly You're more than skin deep You're in the heart of me The exception to the rule About giving no time to an enemy Ch/ And you're saying I‘m the wrong stuff That I’m weak and I will fail , I’m not good enough And I’m making a mistake Like you want me to break Br/ Lunch time over, and its back to the grind Hoped that the fresh air would help me unwind But then you showed up and ruined the hour Both hunter and prey talking on in my mind Ch/ And you're saying I‘m the wrong stuff That I’m weak and I will fail , I’m not good enough And I’m making a mistake Like you want me to break
  2. What Use To Be A worn out book Sits on the shelf Covered in dust The words have faded The ink has run dry Makes me wonder Where are we going What have we become A fairytale gone wrong What we used to dream Has lost it's charm A empty swing Out in the backyard Hanging from a tree A Rope so frayed It's about to break Still I wonder Where are we going What have we become A child's game cast aside What use to bring joy now breaks a heart What use to be Blew away On the wind Time moved on If only we could Start over Again
  3. Rear-View Mirror Duffel bags are packed I’ve tossed ’em in the trunk I sold off my appliances And threw out piles of junk There’s just no use in staying When someone breaks your heart You could live on the memories But that don’t seem too smart (Chorus) LA’s in my rear-view mirror I would look but I might see her There ain’t nothing that could hurt me more So goodbye smog and goodbye beaches Got to hope that loving teaches What it is I am living for And as I’m closing one I’m opening another door When I first reached the coast I thought I’d found my home And then I thought I’d found true love And now I’m all alone (Chorus) LA’s in my rear-view mirror I would look but I might see her There ain’t nothing that could hurt me more So goodbye smog and goodbye beaches Got to hope that loving teaches What it is I am living for And as I’m closing one I’m opening another door (Bridge) I’d never met a woman like her She made me laugh and dance and hurt and cry One moonless night in Silver Lake She called it all a big mistake And then she up and left Nearly stopped my breath And now I’ll look for love somewhere beneath a different sky (Chorus) LA’s in my rear-view mirror I would look but I might see her There ain’t nothing that could hurt me more So goodbye smog and goodbye beaches Got to hope that loving teaches What it is I am living for And as I’m closing one I’m opening another door (Repeat)
  4. Party Till I Die Verse 1: Got the music pumpin' up to eleven some cold beer flowing in my little heaven Everything's just right and everything's just right Feel the beat of the base as it rattles your bones pulsating lights and sweet pheromones Let's rock it tonight Oh rock it tonight Chorus: Turn the key let's start it up Break free, run wild and rev it up Get freaky loose pump pump it up Go crazy nuts man live it up These are the things you just can't buy gonna party till I die Verse 2: You dance through the night lit up by the stars bodies in heat and whirling guitars Hope it never stops Pray it never stops It's the call of the wild that can't be explained flows through your heart and into your brain And you just can't stop No it just won't stop Chorus: Turn the key let's start it up Break free, run wild and rev it up Get freaky loose pump pump it up Go crazy nuts man live it up These are the things you just can't buy gonna party till I die Open those wings and let your spirit fly gonna party till I die
  5. Bedside lamplight SOSHallowed help, to god I pray,The path you walk leads you this way.I'm sure it won't, but just incase,I'll leave some beacons in my wake.Please find the trail of teardrops I have left,Or trace the line of stars that I have wished upon instead.Can't you hear this broken heart beat distress calls from my chest,See my bedside, lamplight, SOSSainted saviour save my soul,Can't fight this loneliness alone.'cause wishful thinking's nothing new,I'll fire some flares up high for you.Please find the trail of teardrops I have left,Or trace the line of stars that I have wished upon insteadCan't you hear this broken heart beat distress calls from my chest,See my bedside, lamplight, SOSNo shining knight of chivalry,No kiss of of life to rescue me,But just because you never know,I'll post some signs up where I go.Please find the trail of teardrops I have left,Or trace the line of stars that I have wished upon insteadCan't you hear this broken heart beat distress calls from my chest,See my bedside, lamplight, SOS
  6. I'm Sober Sophie I stop thinking, when i start drinking. That's what you always say. I get too juiced, and my mouth runs loose And people stare, but hey 'Cause you know who, loves, Y-O-U Not gonna keep it inside. I'm sober Sophie. Can't blame today on the beer. I'm sober Sophie. L' tell anyone who comes near I'm sober Sophie. I really want you to know. I'm sober Sophie. Girl I just love you so. I stop thinking, when I start drinking. That's what you said to me. I say too much, 'cause I'm such a lush But I'm not drinking today. What can I do, m'crazy 'bout you Not gonna keep it inside I'm sober Sophie. Can't blame today on the beer. I'm sober Sophie. Something you gotta hear. I'm sober Sophie. I really want you to know. I'm sober Sophie. Girl I just love you so. I think, you don't want to hear it. You blame it on the beer it ain't the beer talking now. I'm sober Sophie. Can't blame today on the beer. I'm sober Sophie. I'll whisper if you come near. I'm sober Sophie. I really want you to know. I'm sober Sophie. Girl I just love you so.
  7. I thought this lyric was a lot of fun - no offense taken by me. The bridge was very clever. I am not sure I understood or could follow the moving carousel of women's names The comment I have though is that a scooter is not a motorbike You are naming motorbikes (I googled the names) - but for me a scooter is more like a "vespa" - perhaps its just me - anyway a fun lyric for sure!
  8. Hi everyone - Welcome to the July lyrics competition! The timeline is: • Entries will be accepted now through Midnight Pacific Daylight Time (PDT) Sunday, July 30 • Voting (scorecards) will take place Saturday July 31 through Sunday Midnight (PDT) 6th August . • Don't start voting until I officially post the scoring instructions. • I'll post the results shortly after scoring has concluded Here are the rules: 1) It has to be an original lyric that has not been posted on this site previously 2) Send your submission to me (fabkebab) via private message and I will post it anonymously on your behalf. The names of each lyric writer will be revealed at the end of the contest. 3) Once you enter your lyric, you cannot change or revise it, or submit another in its place. 4) I will submit it as is, so watch your format and your spelling. I will not change any of your errors after the lyric has been posted. 5) If you enter, you must submit scores for the other lyrics when the submission portion of the contest ends. All Musers are welcome to submit songs as contestants or score the songs as non-contestants. Any questions or problems should be sent to me (fabkebab) via private message (PM). As I have done previously, I may enter a lyric of my own, just for scoring purposes - It cannot win, will not have scores posted, and will immediately be disqualified once voting has completed (although I will own up to my lyric) ENJOY
  9. Hi all thanks so much for the comments and for taking time to listen to the song in the competition. I must admit I felt very moved by the "one love manchester" event -watching these relatively young musicians come together and show a togetherness and leadership (which one doesnt always find in their music!)
  10. The gentle chorusy plucking guitar had a pink floyd feel to it. For me as a song I thought this was good - but the part I connected to most strongly was the beginning part where everything felt much more exposed and risky with your voice right out there (and it worked perfectly!). When the instrumentation picked up, and especially after the sound effect of the canned laughter (which is fine), the song lost a lot of its appeal because it became a lot less intimate and a bit more like a busker . I also felt like the lyrics could have gone many places after you set the scene of you being a ventriliquist dummy - but in a way you end up restating the scene setter rather than developing a compelling image - perhaps you should use that verse to explore how you have been used, or what has led you to feel you are a tool? Anyway its a solid start which IMHO could benefit from a bit of crafting. I also have to mention when I open the music page for the song, your image for the song has a kind of creepy resemblance to your actual artist picture with yourself and your daughter Its also awesome that at the end of each playing of the song I go to "shes in love" - what a killer, killer song
  11. Production sounds awesome. Enjoyed the vocal tone perhaps its the mention of dublin but I am hearing a bit of Shane McGowan. On to the song Production has a double hit on the bass drum which clutters the mix otherwise it sounds awesome. The structure of the song has a sentance and then "but I survived" for its verse - but somehow that particular lyric feels too "small" and simplistic to create a really neat melody for the verse. perhaps its because you repeat it for a verse? Perhaps it would be better to say "but I survived" either less often, or use a kind of chorus to sing it back to the singer (like them saying "but you survived") to give it more vocal color. Anyway enjoyed it, good job! congratulations on the win
  12. Well done song; a toe tapper for sure. My criticism is that it fits tightly into a large body of similar songs expressing a the same sentiment in a very similar musical way ; I am looking for that all-important spark which makes it stand out in its own spotlight
  13. This felt raw, real and truthful - I really felt caught up in the lyrics and the delivery. Sometimes this stripped down lo-fi approach works (not always) but I think it was perfect for this. If there is one area i would have changed (as a collaborator) it would be to make the bridge single vocal, but reach for a different type of melody to make it stand out without breaking out of the 1+1 format Very nice job
  14. Enjoyable well crafted song. I listened to it a couple of times but i have to say it didnt hold me quite as strongly as some of your other songs . I found myself searching for your band since you have some live pictures, so see if there was any live youtube etc - I found a neat review of you playing live in bristol. Anyway back to the song - I liked it, but it didnt absolutely grab me throughout
  15. Always sounded like "the glock is ticking" I absolutely support the message of the song - nice one there - and the performance was nice. I felt as a song it was just a little bit "samey" - You are trying to call people to action - to get their attention - this is lyrical, but I feel the music was just a little bit too straight to really have anyone get up and take notice - for example if this was shared on facebook ,would someone listen long enough (in 2017) to realise someone was trying to make them change course and save the planet? Anyway a good song, which maybe could benefit from something more daring or quirky music-wise