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fabkebab last won the day on July 28 2017

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About fabkebab

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  • Birthday 20/12/1969

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    Houston, Texas
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    Fatherhood, Songwriting/performing, the mystery of "on stage charisma", The wide world, Gardening, People, Sports, trying to "get" America

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    Traditional Folk, Progressive Rock, plus some classical, acoustic, metal, pop, country, reggae

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  1. fabkebab

    July song competition

    Welcome to the July Song Contest – an open format contest. For any newcomers, open format means the entry can be at any production level - from just you and your guitar to a fully orchestrated masterpiece  TO ENTER: You must post your song in this thread. The timeline is as follows: • Entries will be accepted now through Midnight Pacific Standard Time (PST) , JULY 28, 2018. • Voting (scorecards) will take place JULY 29 through Midnight PST AUG 2, 2018. • Please don’t start scoring until I officially post the scoring instructions. • You must score all other entries or your entry will be disqualified from the contest - just saying! • I'll post the results shortly after scoring is completed. If you plan to enter, please review the revised rules, pinned in this forum. When posting your song to the Songs Feedback Forum, please include: •song title •writer credits (If it’s a collab with another Muser please make that clear by including their M/M id) •audio link Please include the lyrics on your post. Videos are permitted. (Voters are encouraged to refrain from watching any video until after they've scored the song.) All Musers are welcome to submit songs as contestants or score the songs as non-contestants. Any questions or problems should be sent to me (Neal K) via private message (PM).
  2. fabkebab

    June Lyric Competition

    Its beginning to feel a lot like.... July!! Any volunteers? I will do the song competition...
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    June Song Contest

    Is there anyone here who is more than a hobbyist? Now you have me thinking! Anyway as promised, here are my mini-reviews. As always, offered in the spirit of giving some insight into my scoring of your songs! Sunday christian - I put aside my own philosophies for this type of competition, open minded at a songwriters ability to use their tools to craft a message - Unfortunately this one fell a bit short for me. I liked the unusual modal type chording, but I felt like the song needed a lot more ideas to sustain it Summertime song - I thought this was a decent toe tapper with a good, catchy chorus. I felt like a couple of ideas would have improved it a lot (with a tiny effort) "I hope you like my summertime song" should be "sing a long with my summertime song" - the former line is apologetic and meek (which is not needed!). I also would do something with the production to make it feel more "anthemic" - perhaps a load of clapping along etc? The truth comes stumbling in I found this very engaging - the chords and the melody were cleverly done,the production was neat and of course the lyrics have already been crowned with the gold wreath of "lyric of the month". Good song with a neat message. I honestly wouldn't listen to it 100 times, but it did its job, really well done! Dreaming of you The production was delicately handled - everything sounded great - but to be honest I wasnt highly engaged with the song - i was hoping for something very creative to compliment the attention to detail in the production. There was nothing wrong with the track - it is "Radio ready" tomahawk I think I said it all in last month's competition - enjoyable without nailing a "song competition" type criteria for me Bottle I think my favorite part of this was the super loose singing and the groove of the track - the little drum breaks made it enjoyable. I thought it lost a lot of momentum in the quieter section (curiously this quieter section coincides with where the bottle overlaps the soundcloud wave display). A happy song with a darker lyric Forever - The key change for the chorus was unexpected, clunky, rulebreaking - but I really scored you highly for the creativity of it - none of us have a big fanbase that will walk out on us if we are "bold", and yet this type of novelty is quite uncommon - liked it a lot and it made the song for me Right there and then Enjoyable throwback song with a cheerful lyric, Interesting effects on the harmony sections. I liked it, it was a little old fashioned, speaking to me of an earlier time Love and joy - Musically this was interesting with the progression from one section to the next - but I must be honest the lyrics left me lost - they were like placeholders and I think they need to do more work to make this piece seem a cohesive song with a unified message vs. a medley of three connected songs Life around the bend - Earnest and Nice enough but didnt stand out from the pack Not giving up on love The production on this was really nice with the sax. I liked the song, and although the lyrics were interesting they hit kind of a sour note with me - the juxtaposition of these heartbreaking horror situations with the guys romance didnt feel right to me - but, sometimes the fact that you make someone stop and think is one step up from the normal so well done! The piano reminded me a bit of supertramp Star in this town Neat piece of thoughtful storytelling. Quite a convincing take on the "Idol singer" type story. The bare bones production of this song works quite well, allowing space for your voice and the trancelike rythm to take center stage
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    June Song Contest

    I am guessing that person was scoring 1-5 by mistake? Well done to all the entrants, and thanks for the kind voting which came to my song - I will add my comments when I get home!
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    June Lyric Competition

    I dont agree- If you are internally consistent, I think its valuable to get a wider range of opinions! Thanks for being a part of the competition!
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    June Lyric Competition

    I agree! (i actually deleted my comment because I thought I would avoid the "what ifs")
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    June Lyric Competition

    I have to say I was a bit surprised by the low scores. A few people added a slightly apologetic comment saying "I really didnt enjoy the lyrics this month" - which is fair enough. I think maybe it looks worse because of my colored grid! On the bright side, the colorful display shows these bright spots even in the songs lower down on the scoresheet - everyone's song worked for *someone* ; the winners just had a wider appeal.
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    June Lyric Competition

    HI everyone!! It gives me great pleasure to announce June's winner. First of all thankyou to the non contestant voters : BarneyBoy Stars in my eyes A Musical Key Joey M And now to our winners.... 1st place : Today is Everything - Peko 2nd place : Waiting for Amen - Iggy Here is the scoring spreadsheet!! As you can see the margin between places is very tight! Today is everything - Peko 51 3 2.5 2.5 3.5 3 2 2.5 4 2.5 2.5 2.5 2.5 3.5 3.5 2 2.5 3 2.5 1 Waiting for Amen - Iggy 51.5 2 2 3.5 2.5 3.5 2.5 3 3 2 2 2.5 2.5 3 3 3 3.5 2 4 2 Coat of dust - lyrical 53 2 2 3 2.5 3 2.5 1.5 4 1.5 3 3 3 3.5 3.5 3 4 2 4 2 The devil rides a bike - Mr Distraction 57 2.5 3 3 2 3.5 3 3.5 4 2 2.5 2 2.5 3.5 4 3 3.5 2.5 3.5 3.5 The farmer and the fox - PaulCanuck 57 1.5 4 3.5 3.5 3.5 3 4 3 2 2.5 1 2 3.5 3.5 3 4.5 3 4 2 Things my mama said - Eric Borgos 57.5 3 2 3.5 3.5 4 2 3 3 3.5 3 3 3 3.5 4 2 3 2.5 2.5 3.5 Temptation - Ty Cobb 58.5 2.5 2 3.5 3 3 3 2.5 3 2.5 3.5 2.5 3 4 4 3.5 4 3 3.5 2.5 God Ain’t in Texas - Garyhale 58.5 2.5 3 3.5 3.5 3.5 3.5 3 4 3 3 2 3 3 4 2.5 3.5 3 2.5 2.5 Isabella I love you - AndyLef 59.5 2.5 2.5 2.5 3 3.5 3.5 3 4 3 3 3 3 4 3.5 2.5 4 2.5 4 2.5 It happened again today - Kuya 62 2.5 3 4 3 4 3.5 3.5 4 4.5 2.5 3 3 3.5 3.5 2.5 3.5 2 3.5 3 Molly Brooker - Songwolfe 62 2.5 4 3 3.5 4 3.5 3 4 3.5 3 2.5 3 3.5 4 3 3.5 2 4 2.5 My Soul's Been Sold - James L Kleinheksel 63 2 3.5 3.5 3.5 4 3 2.5 4 3 3.5 2 3 4 4 3.5 4 3.5 4 2.5 Tattoo Ring - Clemo 63.5 3 2.5 4 3.5 3 3 4 3 4 3 3 3 4 3.5 3.5 3.5 3 4 3 Smile - Brady 65 3.5 3 3.5 3.5 3.5 3 2.5 4 4 3 3 3.5 4 4 3.5 4 3.5 4 2
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    June Lyric Competition

    Still a couple of hours for any stragglers to get their votes in - still waiting for a couple of entrant scores - If I have not mailed you back, I dont have your scores counted - the onus is on you to please resend them
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    June Lyric Competition

    Scoring is tight!!! Any additional scores I receive are likely to make a big difference For those of you who have not sent a score (or not received confirmation from me) please send them!
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    June Lyric Competition

    June Voting TIME TO SCORE! • Voting (scorecards) will take place Now through --------- July 4 Midnight (PST) • I'll post the results on July 5 PLEASE READ BEFORE SUBMITTING YOUR SCORES: 1. Please title your post, "LYRIC SCORES." 2. When you send me your scores, put the number to the left of the song title, like this: "1.5 - Song Title." 3. Also important…leave a blank spot for your song, but keep the title in the list. For example, if your song title is "Cat Puke Soup," your scores should look like this: 4.5 Song Title 3.0 Song Title ...Cat Puke Soup 1.5 Song Title 4. Please read and rate each lyric using the scoring table below (Scores of 1.0 and 5.0 should be rare). Copy and paste the list at the bottom of this post and insert your score to the left of each title. Then send your scores to me them to me (fabkebab) in a Private Message before Midnight (PDT) July 4 - Do not rank the songs, from 5 down to 1; use the criteria below - Do not rank the songs against each other; use the criteria below - Do not score your own lyric If you are a contestant, you must provide scores or your entry will be disqualified Ask yourself how well the lyric flows/rhymes. Does it create emotions? Can you imagine it set to music? 1.0 - Excellent. 1.5 - Almost Excellent 2.0 - Very Good 2.5 - Good 3.0 - Above Average 3.5 - Average 4.0 - Below Average 4.5 - Poor 5.0 - Very Poor Here are the lyrics: Things my mama said It happened again today The devil rides a bike Temptation Proton Walk Today is everything The farmer and the fox Molly Brooker Tattoo Ring My Soul's Been Sold Coat of dust Smile Isabella I love you God Ain’t in Texas Waiting for Amen
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    June Lyric Competition

    Waiting For AmenVerse 1: Can you tell me how to make it Through another day From the wonder of creation Through the depths of its decay From the promise of the dawn To the horror of the night I'll just keep lying low today and, Staying out of sight I'll stay out of sight Chorus: Lightning flashes in the midnight sky again Distant thunder rolling out the rain Hot wind blowing through my mind again I am just a prayer unanswered Waiting for Amen Verse 2: The nightmares flowing through my blood Are generations deep I'd love to show them all to you But they'll just have to keep Please whisper all your secrets While I tell you all my lies So you can have redemption And I can sympathize I'll just sympathize Bridge Just like a prayer unfolding I stumble on my way A simple hymn I keep on singing Waiting for Amen Waiting for my sweet Amen Chorus: Lightning flashes in the midnight sky again Distant thunder rolling out the rain Bloodwind blowing through the night again I am just a dusty prayer Waiting for Amen
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    June Lyric Competition

    God Ain’t in Texas 1 Some say they seen God Off of the highway Out in West Texas Where the Rio Grande flows But I’ve worn down the miles From Booker to Brownsville And ain’t never seen God Least that’s what I know 2 I ain’t been searchin’  Or lookin’ for answers I just follow the sun Let the wind do the rest Ain’t rhyme or reason For this life that I’m livin’ Forty years in this state I still feel like a guest Ch God ain’t in Dallas, Fort Worth or Austin If he stopped by El Paso he sure didn’t stay long Don’t think our paths crossed, kickin’ dust my way But my lady said maybe he’s here in this song 3 The years ain’t been kind Most days I feel shattered But I stick to the highway It’s a big rodeo Maybe one day When I’m runnin’ on fumes I’ll cash in my chips And find my way home Ch God ain’t in Dallas, Fort Worth or Austin If he stopped by El Paso he sure didn’t stay long Don’t think our paths crossed, kickin’ dust my way But my lady said maybe he’s here in this song Outro Don’t think our paths crossed, kickin’ dust my way But my lady said maybe he’s here in this song
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    June Lyric Competition

    Isabella I Love you Verse 1 She was from down south I could hear it in her voice It’s timbre had me fallin’ She was my first choice Big time, oh yeah big time Verse 2 So easy on the eye I didn’t know it then Loving and tender She’d be more than a friend Lover, yeah my lover Chorus Isabella I love you, every little thing you do Your country girl accent, arrows on through – to my heart, my heart Isabella I love you, more than I can tell So many lonely years spent, at the wishing well – of love dear, of love Verse 3 Love her sense of humour Her eyes flash with mirth Always takes the bright side Brings me back to earth Funny, yeah she's funny Chorus Isabella I love you, every little thing you do Your country girl accent, arrows on through – to my heart, my heart Isabella I love you, more than I can tell So many lonely years spent, at the wishing well – of love dear, of love Break She says there’s a creaky old wind pump, still turning down south Her folk’ll be swinging on their sunset porch She’ll take me to meet them someday soon I hope Me, her city boy from up north - oh Chorus Isabella I love you, every little thing you do Your country girl accent, arrows on through – to my heart, my heart Isabella I love you, more than I can tell So many lonely years spent, at the wishing well – of love dear, of love Tag Isabella - I love you
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    June Lyric Competition

    Smile I still hear the words on your lips The lips that I knew too well I still feel the same, I love you anyway, But that can't be changed with a smile I still hear the voices of old Begging me to set them free I wish that I could, but it would be misunderstood And that can't be changed with a smile I still see the fires in the night Burning everything I've ever known I want to put them out, but I'm afraid I'll be found out, And the can't be changed with a smile I still see your ghost in my room Burying the thoughts I had for you I wish I could feel, but nothing's ever real, And that can't be changed with a smile I saw him on the corner of the road Holding up a sign, out in the cold I put my window down, and tried to help him out, He wanted nothing but a smile I saw her walking down my street More beautiful than I could ever be I tried to look her way, she turned and started to say: I'm happy that you know how to smile
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