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Oswlek

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    Beatles, Radiohead, Trent Dabbs, Pink Floyd,

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  1. Oswlek

    Collaboration Challenge: Emotional Impact

    You and me both, Murph. Just look at my stretch immediately beforehand. 😄
  2. Oswlek

    Collaboration Challenge: Emotional Impact

    Thanks, everyone. Somehow I had completely missed that.
  3. Oswlek

    Collaboration Challenge: Emotional Impact

    Is there a number ranking? For some reason I got it in my head that naming the right emotion(s) was the entire focus of the "scoring" phase.
  4. Oswlek

    Chord Progressions

    Might as well throw my half cent in.... I think this thread goes off course immediately due to a faulty assumption. When I get a similar criticism I don't hear, "songs must vary chords between sections!" Instead, I interpret it as, "this particular song (or version of the song) doesn't do enough to distinguish each section." Tweaking the chords is just one of many possible fixes, a change that often gives a lot of bang for your buck, When you recognize a critique is about your song and not music in general, pointing out that other well known songs have used the same technique doesn't really get you anywhere. Not that I'm above doing it at times.
  5. Oswlek

    Collaboration Challenge: Emotional Impact

    Some questions, if you don't mind. Let's say I post an awful song that is clearly trying to convey horror, but doesn't remotely make anyone feel that emotion. Are listeners still supposed to submit horror as one of the emotions in their scorecard? Is there a way to acknowledge that my song doesn't actually work as intended? If that's during the discussion, is it possible my song, despite its poor quality, could "win" since the intended emotion is so obvious ? Thanks in advance for your help.
  6. Oswlek

    Home is You

    Sorry, forgot to comment on this. My biggest issue is that I don't see how you got anything wrong in the first place. The first verse references places we call home, but the overall lyric makes clear that the essence of "home" is something apart from the place itself. I'd approach this from the perspective of development rather than contrast if I were you.
  7. Oswlek

    Home is You

    Hi Patty, I had a feeling that this is where you were coming from, and it's an interesting train of thought. I just feel like it is underdeveloped and extraneous to this particular piece. Goodness knows I've had lots of songs where information I thought was essential to the story was best left unsaid, because I just couldn't explore it properly. If you are really trying to avoid Hallmark, I don't think a single line mentioned in passing cuts it. Nor do I think that is even a necessary goal, IMO the Hallmark quality is precisely what I find endearing about this song. As always, keep or sweep.
  8. Oswlek

    Everything is alright

    Cool stuff. The timing is all over the place, but it's clear what you are going for. Nice energy and the theme matches the music well. My immediate first impression has to do with the "It's good to..." motif. I was right there with you for the first four lines, but IMO the song is pining for a melodic change on the next four. Keeping the melody the same stunts all the energy you've built up by that point. And then repeating the last line with the same melody again puts the final nail in for me. All the sameness makes it feel like the song isn't going anywhere. I think it's worth trying to find a material change for the vocal melody for lines 5-8 and then don't repeat the last line. It coming at the end of the stanza already shines extra light, no need to double it up. I'm not sure how I feel about the chorus overall, but I don't think it warranted a repeat of the last line. If this were my song, I'd hold off on the repeats until the final chorus. As always, keep or sweep.
  9. Oswlek

    Home is You

    This is really lovely. Emotional with a lovely marriage of sound and meaning. I've listened five times now trying to find something more concrete to offer, but all I can find is the vague sense of mild disjointedness. At times I feel like the song is too wordy, but then I listen more closely and I can't find any easy cuts. Then it feels like maybe the song meanders a bit, but then I try to imagine it without the PC and it feels wrong. Something is sticking in my craw, but I can't figure it out. What I can point out are a couple lyric issues: For me, this line is trying to do too much. Everything about this song paints home as glowingly positive. No matter how crumbling the physical structure, the sense of home is pure and comforting. Only here is there a ring of negativity and it feels out of place to me. Yes, some people do move on from home, but I'm not sure this is the platform for such an idea. Particularly when it isn't expanded on anywhere else. I think I get where you were going here. This seems like a transition from the global "you" to a specific person. But I don't think it works. Nothing said before is remotely controversial, so I'm puzzled every time wondering what the speaker couple possibly have been wrong about. I'm not certain there is even a contrast between the original sense of "home" and the last one to have been wrong about. Lastly, I don't think the song is served by having three separate choruses. IMO, it would be better to synch up the first two. If you want to keep the change in C3, then it will come off as being even more pronounced if it breaks the patter rather than continuing it. Lovely stuff guys. Well done.
  10. Oswlek

    I Was The One

    No critique, just commenting to let you know I'm listening again for the sheer pleasure of it.
  11. Oswlek

    Even Though

    By far my favorite of yours, Dom. The music has such fun energy that you barely notice the vocal is almost spoken the whole way through. And the relaxed feel of the vocal lets you touch on conflicted subject matter without weighing the piece down. The musical connection between the bridge and verse is perfect with gorgeous transitions between each. Feel free to take the advice about the mix, but don't change a note of the song. FWIW, when the solo came in, George Harrison in his early 60's suit immediately came to mind.
  12. Oswlek

    What's Wrong With My Heart

    Sounds like a timeless tune that's been sung around a campfire for as long as anyone can remember. Well done.
  13. Oswlek

    Music isn’t the Same

    I've come to the conclusion it is just part of getting older, perhaps even something biological. Hating the new music seems to be a rite of passage for older generations, and most people I know - even musicians - don't have the same depth of experience as they had as teenagers. At least I have new ways of interacting with music (composing, arranging, producing), I'm not sure what I'd do if my relationship with it were purely as a listener.
  14. Oswlek

    September Song Contest

    Words and music by Oswlek Percussion by Stickboy and Oswlek Piano by Chazmataz Bass by DoctorCastille (youtube) and Oswlek All Fall Down There's no mystery Why we sometimes land on the ground As long as we're here We'll spin like kids playing Rosey All fall down We all fall down Can't change history But we can pull yourselves off the ground As long as we're here We'll spin like kids playing Rosey All fall down We all fall down After all we spin together (Like kids playing Rosey, back off the ground)
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