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  1. 5 points
    (Folky, alt-country, Americana....Written after listening to a bunch of Townes Van Zandt, Waylon Jennings, and Guy Clark....Intended for recording with acoustic guitar, electric guitar, banjo, bass, and light drums...Only one word in the chorus, " hopin' " is written accented, however any -ing words could be sung with the same accenting..or accentin'.) (V1) Another evening... I'm sitting here in Asheville. Wishing it was Nashville, And that I was wearing boots. Same old story... You always said this place would burn me. But I can't seem to stop returning. To the city of my roots. (V2) Remember Houston...? And the smell of the refinery? Or the way the sun would blind me? We always liked the evening best. Then like a freight-train... You rolled off to California. Didn't even give me warning. Just a note that said, "Gone West." (Chorus) So goodnight Texas, goodnight Carolina. Goodnight to the broken hearts sleeping all alone. I'll leave the light on, and I'll keep the front door open. And I'll try to keep on hopin' the road leads you back home. (V3) I didn't follow... I still don't know the reason. I waited for a season. Then I headed East again. Appalachia... Waiting there to greet me. Always trying to keep me Like an old seductive friend. (Chorus) So goodnight Texas, goodnight Carolina. Goodnight to the broken hearts sleeping all alone. I'll leave the light on, and I'll keep the front door open. And I'll try to keep on hopin' the road leads you back home. (V4) I lay my head... In the house built by my father. Feeling like a robber Stealing precious precious days. Maybe tomorrow... I can catch a bus to Nashville. Wave goodbye to Asheville. Maybe set the place ablaze. (Chorus) Goodnight bones, goodnight heart of mine. Goodnight to the memories of everyone that's gone. I'll leave the light on, and I'll keep the front door open. And I'll try to keep on hopin' the road leads you back home.
  2. 5 points
    Author's note: Thanks to kuya, a talented writer on this forum for inspiring this piece - I hope you find it useful. So, your lyrics are almost completed. You can hear the music in your head. This song is going to be your best to date - you just know it! You need to hit the record button before your inspiration wanes. But... There is that one weak line in the verse. It ends with that word you found on Rhymezone. It rhymes nicely with its counterpart and it's a well-known word - so no issues there. It has perfect prosody, perfect assonance, nice meter. But it introduces an image or an inference that takes the listener out of the storyline, breaks the mood you've built up and just seems out of place. And you can't find another rhyming word that fits. You've tried to jam in something that doesn't rhyme, but that made the verse feel unstable, slipshod. This is now a show-stopper. All your efforts have been in vain. The English language has let you down again - crap! But wait - there is a solution. It's right in front of your eyes: Can't find a rhyme? - Repeat that line!! Think about it - we want our lyrics to be "conversational" and people often repeat lines when they are trying to make a point. ("Lock her up" sadly comes to mind). Humans like repetition - it doesn't require us to process new information - our minds can relax and bask in the familiar. It strengthens the impact of what has just been sung. Sometimes it even causes the listener to hear a different meaning in the line he/she hasn't thought of the first time around. Sure, we all know enough to repeat the hook usually in the chorus, but if you're like me, sometimes forget we can repeat a line in the verse or bridge. It's another arrow in your songwriter's quiver - don't forget to use it!
  3. 3 points
    I do a little art on the side. Woodwork, painting, furniture and some photography.
  4. 3 points
    I decided to scratch the last lyric and start over. Version 2.0 Improvement suggestions anyone? v1 I don’t trust the food most eat I stay away from doctors The government is cheating me It’s all bullshit, I don’t need v2 I don’t work a 9 to 5 I stay away from normal The walls are down and now I see??? It’s all bullshit, society ch. Today I choose my American Dream Society is no place for me Today I live my American Dream I do it my way I live free v3 I don’t feel anxiety I stay away from fakers Politicians are not for me It’s all bullshit, I don’t need v4 I don’t believe in policy I stay away from payments Philosophy will set me free From this bullshit, society ch. Today I choose my American Dream Society is no place for me Today I live my American Dream I do it my way I live free br. I had to leave that crazy world A prisoner to all my stuff I gave it up I had to try this brand new world ??? Society I had enough chorus
  5. 2 points
    She Moves Through the Mist ©2018 Robert George BMI She moves through the mist After dark along a lonely, quiet stretch of beach And she walks between the grains of sand where time can’t reach Does she wear a silver gown each night Or a thin cloak made of sheer moonlight She moves through the mist Once I thought I saw her lifted skyward in the dark Borne away upon a shooting star’s enchanted arc And it seemed like ev’ry cresting wave Was the cross above a sailor’s grave Legends say that shipwreck was a myst’ry Men and mounts were lost within that galleon And her lover galloped into hist’ry Riding bareback on a drowning stallion Now she moves through the mist And no man of flesh and bone can be her paramour She awaits the phantom kiss of her conquistador She believes he’ll meet her on the shore And they’ll ride the night forevermore Yes, she moves through the mist After dark along a lonely, quiet stretch of beach She moves through the mist She moves through the mist…
  6. 2 points
    Here's my recent song. This has been the most time consuming song I've done. I have a bunch of songs in the works with keyboards (got one for Christmas), but this one is all guitars. In fact, in some places I have 4 different guitar riffs going at the same time. Considering some are double tracked, I think at times I have 7 guitar tracks running at once. I'll never do that again. If any of you fine people have any suggestions, I'll probably fix it and put this one to bed because I've been at it too long already! It's not my best song, but not my worst either. But if you have any comments, including you don't like the arrangement or theme or even the song, trust me I won't deny it! But a few fresh looks from my buds on this board would be nice before I finish it up. Thanks for everything. P.S. I've been away for a few months so haven't listened to anyone's songs. Whenever people comment, I always try to reciprocate if they have an active song. I Don't Mind Did the world blow up yet? Or was it just a dream? I thought I saw it on the Internet Man what a catastrophe! They blamed it on my ignorance They must enjoy the entertainment But I couldn't plead my innocence I must have missed my arraignment Chorus: I don't mind the weight upon my shoulders And I don't mind the things life puts me through It's just another day gone and I'm another day older But I don't mind I don't mind I lost my job yesterday At least that's what I heard I didn't care much for it anyway I was underpaid and overworked I was home sick with my little boy When they announced the corporate layoffs Now I can't afford to be unemployed With all these debts I need to to pay off Chorus I don't mind when things get in the way I'll take the world on come what may I don't see gray skies only blue When I'm with you I don't mind
  7. 2 points
    Morning Bird ©2018 Robert George BMI Morning bird When I’m walking barefoot in the glistening dew I have wondered if it’s God I’m listening to In your feathered melody Morning bird When I hear the valor in your glorious tune I can sense that peace will be victorious soon And mankind will be set free Perhaps you’re just a humble bird And my part is not your part And yet the music that I’ve heard Builds a warm nest for my heart Morning bird When I’m walking barefoot in the glistening dew I have wondered if it’s God I’m listening to In your feathered melody I know your station in the sky Is much loftier than kings And your whistling helps you fly So much higher than your wings Morning bird When I’m walking barefoot in the glistening dew I have wondered if it’s God I’m listening to In your feathered melody Morning bird When I hear the valor in your glorious tune I can sense that peace will be victorious soon And mankind will be set free Morning bird Morning bird…
  8. 2 points
    Breaking-up instrumental with lyrics
  9. 2 points
    This song was pretty popular in 1965. Uses 2 chords that are not interesting at all. But the energy is there. The song is featured in the Rock and Roll Hall of Fame's exhibit showcasing "The 500 Songs that Shaped Rock and Roll". The Seeds performed "Pushin' Too Hard" during a 1968 episode of the television sitcom The Mothers-in-Law. Saxon revisited the song on his 2008 solo album The King of Garage Rock. [VIDEO] [/VIDEO]
  10. 2 points
    @Lazz Just reading your post for the first time. Look how many are available (for free I'm assuming) on youtube! yeah! Of those you've listed I've only seen Throw Down Your Heart (I play a little banjo so this was a must see) and Orfeu Negro (I agree that it's a classic). Can't wait to check these out. I love tasting music from around the world and I love jazz. Really interested in seeing that Romani flick and the Newport Festival flick. Actually all of them, but I'll probably start with those. Thanks so much!, J. B. PS, I'm going to add this one to the list, a film from Mike Seeger, called Talking Feet: Highlight of film showing D. Ray White here: Full flick here: http://www.folkstreams.net/film-detail.php?id=121
  11. 2 points
    In the spirit of warren zevon..... (At least the wolf howls) I rewrote the chorus because I wasn't happy with it. I changed the line about the claws, and I also changed the title from Laid my head and cried to Hung my head and cried. Is it better or worse? Hung my head and cried revised july 29 One day a hungry wolf came down and spied a dog upon the road The wolf had never seen a dog at least that's what I'm told The wolf said hey what's wrong with you and what happened to your nuts And what's that thing around your neck and how'd you get that gut The dog said I am man's best friend I can sleep out of the rain I never do a dog gone thing I guess I can't complain The wolf could only look away he shook his head he sighed Hungry as I've ever been I always kept my pride [wolf howl] Before I'd lose my dignity I'd have starved myself and died If I knew I'd end up like you I'd have hung my head and cried [wolf howl] They cut my balls off the dog said when I took to chasing bitches At least I get 3 meals a day one less thing that itches They put this thing around my neck to show who is my owner I hardly even notice it least I'm not a loner The wolf could only look away he shook his head and sighed Hungry as I've ever been I always kept my pride [wolf howl] Before I'd lose my dignity I'd have starved myself and died If I knew I'd end up like you I'd have hung my head and cried [wolf howl] Now some men they are like that dog trading freedom for a collar But I'm still howling at the moon you can hear me holler [wolf howl] ************************************************************************************** Laid my head and cried Original version One day a hungry wolf came down and spied a dog upon the road The wolf had never seen a dog at least that's what I'm told The wolf said hey what's wrong with you and what happened to your balls And what's that thing around your neck and how'd you lose your claws The dog said I am man's best friend I can sleep out of the rain I never do a dog gone thing I guess I can't complain And the wolf said ... Clover for my blanket my pillows are the stones [wolf howl] The stars they are my nightlight wherever I may roam [wolf howl] Hungry as I've ever been I never lost my pride [wolf howl] If I knew I'd end up like you I'd have laid my head and cried [wolf howl] Yeah if I knew I'd end up like you I'd have laid my head and cried The dog said I don't hunt so good not an alpha male like you They bred the wolf right out of me so what's a dog to do They cut my balls off just as soon as I start chasing bitches At least I get 3 meals a day one less thing that itches They put this thing around my neck to show who is my owner I hardly even notice it least I'm not a loner And the wolf say ... Clover for my blanket my pillows are the stones [wolf howl] The stars they are my nightlight wherever I may roam [wolf howl] Hungry as I've ever been I never lost my pride [wolf howl] If I knew I'd end up like you I'd have laid my head and cried [wolf howl] Yeah if I knew I'd end up like you I'd have laid my head and cried Now some men they are like that dog trading freedom for a collar But I'm still howling at the moon you can hear me holler [wolf howl] Like the wolf say ... etc.
  12. 2 points
    I am looking for feedback, am l evoking enough imagery, is anyone else there with me or do l need more vibrancy? Any other comments/opinions are welcome 🤗 This is my renaissance (c) 2018 V1 I took a life, l took a life that's mine I booked a night, l booked a night designed I shook a knife, l shook a knife, to fight I took her life, l took her life that's right. V2 I crushed her spine, l crushed her spine in time I hooked her up, l hooked her up, up tight I slayed her, l erased her and her plight Then l walked from dark into the light PC Threw away those murderous robes No-one else will ever know, The everyday's been overthrown. Let's feast and dance, light every sconce... Chorus This is my Renaissance This is my Renaissance All arise and stomp the beat with me Raise your arms, turn clockwise and sway along the street Dance upon rich tapestries laid for our bare feet This is my Renaissance This is my Renaissance Bridge All the words long hidden will once again be spoken All that has been sleeping will once again be woken All that's been imprisoned has once again been freed Love beauty truth is now my creed. Chorus (repeat)
  13. 2 points
    Shouldn't it be the big man downstairs - or maybe size doesn't matter here
  14. 2 points
    You probably don't want to hear more about practicing, but... I find there is a trick to practicing... When you practice, just focus on the hard parts. It's more fun to play the parts that are easy I know. But if you focus just on the hard parts over and over again (whatever it is, changing chords, making barre chords, finger picking, etc) until you master them and then link them with the song you will learn your song faster and you will improve your skill.
  15. 2 points
    It looks as if they were switched off - but not deliberately. Maybe as part of an upgrade? Not sure. Anyway, they are back Note: they were always disabled in the contest forums and in self-promotion
  16. 2 points
    But practice still. It comes with a guarantee.
  17. 2 points
    You have just entered the rabbit hole. Be afraid ...
  18. 2 points
    Viking's We're not waiting for you to answer Your from a time gone past sir We're not waiting for you Viking's We don't think that you've got the answer I think that you're a dancer Without much of a show Viking's We all watch you wonder Through the parks were You will ponder All the life that you lead Viking's The world is yours to plunder I don't think that you'll ever win her But I know that you'll try Your so old your so cold (times four) Viking's You walk around in groups now Thinking that you have the power But you really don't
  19. 2 points
    Practice. More practice.
  20. 2 points
    Rabbit Hole When I feel my hands on you I shiver in the dark and warm up in the light There's no reason, I'm not teasing I couldn't find a way to make it wrong or right Warm in winter, cold in summer I'm turned around and spinning in my head at night Wake up feeling upset, kneeling Try to keep my chin up, try to stay upright But it's a long way down The rabbit hole I've found in you To be so true Needles in my spine Blankets wet with wine Couldn't hold another even if I tried I struggle now to find the right way to bind life to me As I'm falling down The rabbit hole I've found in you What can I do? So lonely Lost in the black depths of your eyes And angels pass me When you hypnotize But I couldn't hold another even if I tried I struggle now to find the right ways to bind life to me As I'm falling down The rabbit hole I've found in you What can I do? Down the Rabbit Hole.
  21. 2 points
    Nice... not sur eabout the changes in the first line of the last chorus, as the hook/title needs to be there - maybe a repeated verse at the end, brining back the original first chorus line?
  22. 2 points
    Perhaps the expression should be... "Those who can, do. But those who like to eat & pay their bills teach"? ...just sayin Tom
  23. 1 point
    Death is but a time machine If life is but a dream Reaching out and fading in Nothing’s at it seems Take me to the water’s edge Life’s ever flowing stream Where consciousness is lit again And lungs forget to breathe I am night I am day I am steel and glass and clay I am sun Moon and stars I am neither near nor far Walk with me through solitude Dance with me through pain Search my mind for fantasy And you’ll never solve the maze Time is but a ferris wheel A book that won’t unturn Infant eyes dilate to see The child that can’t unlearn I am night I am day I am steel and glass and clay I am sun Moon and stars I am neither near nor far The door to phantomville remains Only in human brains We kiss our dogs and feed the cat To push away the pain Our earthly shackles will not break And no key shall be found As hairs of grey and ageing bones Are lowered into the ground I am night I am day I am steel and glass and clay I am sun Moon and stars I am neither near nor far
  24. 1 point
    Wrote this awhile back but now added a middle part... The Ocean The waves stole the shore like an incoming thief As the moon tugged the ocean that lapped at our feet We stared at the sky and we looked for the North Star Guiding our sailors home Jane comes out nightly, remembering the leaving While Amy sits all by herself in her grieving Neither had thought this is how it would be Bringing their sailors home We came from the ocean yet it bludgeons and batters Then spits out our souls like they don't even matter With flotsam and jetsam and keepsakes in tatters Sending our sailors home The wind took our voices and silenced our words Dampened their remnants so nobody heard Still prayer brings us hope and we hope that the North Star Brings all our sailors home We know that the ocean is cold and it’s deep And sometimes there’s people and memories it keeps When storms come and winds blow with hurricane force And sailors lose sight of that star in the north When red skies in morning brings fear to their eyes Their thoughts turn to loved one that they’ve left behind They trust in their captain and crewmates and God Sometimes that delivers, sometimes it does not We came from the ocean yet it bludgeons and batters It spits out our souls like they don't even matter With flotsam and jetsam and keepsakes in tatters Sending our sailors home We turned and walked back to the village in stillness And said our goodnight and as God is our witness We fell to our knees and we prayed for deliverance Please bring our sailors home
  25. 1 point
    Honestly - Light of Day https://www.imdb.com/title/tt0093415/ You've never seen Michael J Fox in a dramatic role like this. He's great, Joan Jett also did a great performance. Eddie and The Cruisers - https://www.imdb.com/title/tt0085475/?ref_=nv_sr_1
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