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    Hi S Melody was too generic and the story seemed hard to follow, your set up verse being of metaphors then stumbling in to a half thought out story just doesnt wash for a folk song. Plus the song was way too long. As I've said to lyric writers in the lyric writing forum, could you hear someone singing these lyrics in public? Are they interesting enough to hold an audiences attention? On both accounts I would say no. Again, melody too generic, and story line not defined enough to attach yourself to. just my two cents worth R-N-R Jim
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    Admittedly I am not an expert on "Copyright", but my understanding has always been that it does NOT protect song titles or short phrases. An excerpt from the Library of Congress webpage... Since I question whether a single line from a song is eligible for registration as a "TrademarK", you may not be in violation of anything. Again, I'm no expert, but I figured it wouldn't hurt to add the little that I do know. Here's the link that excerpt was taken from - https://www.copyright.gov/help/faq/faq-protect.html#title Hope this helps guys! Tom
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    Ah man! That’s a great track buddy, very catchy and just great pop! Well done. The music is perfect and you sing very well. The only thing I picked up on was the word “disappear” it’s a syllable more than what you needed. It’s not bad by any means, it’s just everything else fits like a glove. Awesome job! Leo😁
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    I think that DonnaMarilyn's refurbishment is a definite improvement. It still feels a bit unfocused but definitely clearer to me. I think either the music or the lyrics (or both) will need a rewrite. It's always interesting to see which ideas and images are naturally grouped together in different languages (by figures of speech, common modes of thought etc) - the Sapir-Whorf Hypothesis strikes again!
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    Yes, I also thought "Down the Drain" is a misfit for the title. It's jarring and doesn't go with the dreamy / introspection aspect of the lyric. I think 'Games of Silence" would be one stronger option.
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    According to the Copyright Office they say that some titles can be protected if they represent a substantial portion of the lyric itself. That would be songs like: I've Got Tears in My Ears From Lying on My Back in My Bed While I Cry Over You Everybody's Got Something to Hide Except Me and My Monkey Still, you have to go to court to prove it... =Bob=