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Background info on some of the tracks I write (if anyone cares. I find it interesting, the story behind peoples songs).

 

Who knows what else? We'll see how it goes.

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UnitedByRhyme

Hi everyone.

 

I have a track I've been working on for a while now, I'm stuck on where to go next. I'll add the lyrics below here and then I'll address what I'm going for and other relevant bits and pieces (references, what it's about etc)

 

So these are the lyrics so far. Verse 1 is almost finished but needs work with flow, some of it doesn't fit as of right now. Verse 2 is just a random assortment of lines at the moment and verse 3 is yet to be started.

 

VERSE 1

Let society dictate our place in the world
Step by step, you don't have a say, just fit into the mould
Don't question anything you're told
May the unseen sculptor craft the perfect follower
I don't want to hear that shit, it is or isn't fair
Who would've thought we'd be compared to rabbits in a headlights glare?
A booby trapped planet causing this effect
As I stumble over tripwires borderlining the edges of being politically correct
I swear we're the exact same generic lego men
Clones with different hair colours, Moira Burton and Sherry Birkin
(Moira everyday)
And, I reach for pen and paper in my car glove compartment
As the community evolves from Bedrock to the Skypad Apartments

 

VERSE 2 bits and pieces

Take your place in the line, just follow
Check out the expiry date stamped right beside your barcode
We aren't free, we're blinded by the dancing lights of a cinema screen
Trapped within a belief that was force fed down our family trees

 

I never thought we'd reach a time when there's more meaning in a Taylor Swift song than in our lives
There's a more striking resemblance between this world and RE than Dracula and Dom Sheed

 

In a society where distrust spreads like a disease and breeds like rats
How could communication not take the first hit?
I hate to say it but this isn't the good old days I hear so much about, we're living in the new age
If Annie was okay before in YEAR chances are we're now cowering under the same table
Yet mils apart in connection

Where the stranger is the symbol used for danger

Every stranger you converse with could be your murderer
I swear this world's mantra us work to the grave and obey

Lower the mask from their face youll see they have the face of the....


Sly hands shaped us

Are you really yourself? I don't think so

A society built on disrepair
Something about despair

Shaped by the sly hands of our predecessors
If everyone's the same how can anyone make a difference
This is the planet of great apes restrained in rusty chains, different is dangerous, that's why we're all the same

 

NOTE that alot of that verse 2 stuff is just ideas and mightn't be used. I have just copied that directly from my phone notes as it is so its a bit shorthand.

 

SO WHAT I'M AFTER...

A TITLE : At this stage its called Disease, as in its kind of a disease spreading through society that we tend to be distrustful of strangers and so don't often talk to someone unless we know them. Although I'd be interested in how many people agree with that statement.

 

When i started the track, i saw an add on TV about how we can't communicate anymore. Of course this was blamed on technology, but it got me thinking. I reckon it has more to do with how society has changed. The world has become a more dangerous place (?). I know my grandparents happily talked to strangers back 'in the day'. But now, to sit next to a stranger on a train would be seen as wierd and unwelcome (?). Or is it just me?

 

Anyway the lyrics ended up becoming a bit about the lack of our ability to be ourselves in a society that has a predetermined mould for how it wants us to be. I cover that theme a lot subconciously.

 

So yeah any lines or where to go nexts are kind of what I'm after. Thoughts welcome as well on lyrics so far.

 

THE REFERENCES:

MOIRA AND SHERRY: Resident Evil franchise characters. Look exactly the same with different hair colours. The bracket bit is a backing vocal.

 

SKYPAD APARTMENTS/BEDROCK: I think most people will get it, reference to old cartoons (before my time). One is set in the future amd the other the past. Flintstones and Jetsons.

 

RE is Resident Evil abbreviated.

 

DOM SHEED: An AFL player for West Coast Eagles. If you look at the right pictures of him or see him in TV on match day he looks like Dracula.

 

ANNIE: That was a reference to Michael Jacksons Smooth Criminal, may or may not use it.

 

Like I say alot of those notes for V2 will be discarded.

 

Think thats all. Keep up the good writing everyone, I'm enjoying reading all your work. 

UnitedByRhyme

Hey guys

 

So I've been asked about copyright and if I have permission to use the beats I'm using and stuff (In the comments in BANQUET). I have just contacted the places I am using and asked, I'll be waiting on responses. Emails were sent at roughly 10:30 Tasmania time, on the 3rd of May.

 

But I still feel like it was unnecessary, I'd love to hear from anyone exactly what the big deal is.:) I am not writing that out of spite, I would honestly like to hear and learn. I would understand if I was making money off the tracks, but I won't be. As well as that, I did do some research prior and it was 50/50 about whether or not you needed permission.

 

1. It's a mixtape, that means an unofficial release and the only people who ever know it exists will be people who search for it.

2. Everything will be creditted where necessary.

3. No money will be made.

4. I see it as a win/win. Sure, I get free promotion by using the beat but so does the underground artists who the beat belongs to. If someone likes an instro they hear in my track, they look in the credits and can be directed to the real artists.

5. Even if I get permission and the artist say yes, all they'll do is say 'but you can't sell it and it must be creditted.' The only difference between what I was doing and that was not asking. Of course, they could say no, but does anyone have any suggestions as to why???

 

Maybe this is an issue because of demographics, age differences, attitudes...I'm not really sure. I can see how using someone else's work is an issue, but to me it isn't as serious as some of you seem to think:). Anyway, I'd like to hear your say.

 

And one other thing: its not only beats I'm planning on using. I was going to use some samples from THE SIMPSONS GAME at the end of BANQUET, there's a line about "slugs sucking up sexy sleaze with a smile" which I kind of think fits in with the theme. Thing is, from my research the massive businesses won't bother chasing you for an uncredited/no permission sample. They make enough money and it isn't worth their time and resources to chase down someone like me. Thoughts on that?

 

Can I also just clarify that people know what a mixtape is? It's an unofficial release usually used to promote yourself when you start out (though as I prefer underground stuff, it's not really about promoting, its about getting stuff out there). A mixtape uses beats by other artists and is full of samples, for example check out SAVILIAN KID OR KONCEPT MIXTAPE (I admit the lyrics to his stuff suck). It samples beats from heaps of artists. Often they are only used in rap, they arent as serious in other genres though do occasionally pop up. A rap mixtape will usually have no original production. Everything is done by you: album art, liner notes, pressing and all that (if you want, mine will just be digital). You basically spend money making it that you won't make back.

 

I didn't mean to drag this out so long but yeah, hope to hear some thoughts on the copyright thing and has anyone had similar issues, either with not getting permission or using an uncredited sample?

 

Cheers guys

UnitedByRhyme

I don't know how many people care but i thought id talk a bit about BANQUET and the references, and just the track in general. Excuse the grammar and punctuation, im typing this off my phone.

 

So its a politically charged song, ive tried to take the 'eat what someone says' phrase literally. The track is about a group of politicians (im from Australia) at a banquet table eating an extravagant meal...us. The followers. Instead of questioning what we are told, we blindly follow, we are left in the dark by the powers. Maybe its paranoia but its just my opinion. So the politicians are eating us, a reference to them taking advantage of us. Also, it makes for a good final line 'and yet WE eat what THEY say'.

 

Thats the bones of it, i could be more detailed but ill hold it there.

 

Ive included some extra lyrics here that I may use in the song, not arranged yet. My cousin is going to feature on the track hopefully, if he can come up with some lines. Otherwise ill have to work some of these lines in.

 

Thoughts? 

 

EXTRA LYRICS

Listen in to the clatter of the cutlery and the lack of idle chatter, they get straight to business round here, no time for banter
Candle light dancing over sallow faces, appearances always more evil in the dark with a light shone beneath it
Appetiser completed, out comes the main course, the main corpse, they say the meat tastes best when it comes from an oblivious host
Comparable to lamb I suppose
Giants to the gnomes, putrid sound of marrow been sucked from bones
I got my invite in the post the other day, I didn't go, a party without Jane Tyrrell isn't worth going to
Laughter at the party is more shallow than Chris Hemsworths emotions, anyone who'd date Miley Cyrus deserves that roast
And so it goes, I'm sure the saying is work to the grave and keep your head buried in the earth
There's a price you pay for asking questions, ask Juanita Nelson
Let's face it, we all know she was skinned alive, dismembered and stuffed in plastic bags, distributed worldwide
With that in mind, they hit the media with smiles, claim that we're equals but to them we live in the shadows of animals
The politicians of the banquet table, their main course devoured, morsels of meat stuck between teeth ten times the size of ours
As the sun sets a bad moon rises, our existence pitiful in the eyes of our powers
A glass clings and a toast is raised dedicated to the declining state of the individuality of the human race
Claim to fame, painted grins like clowns and just as haunting, taunting, daunting, recipe is unrelenting
Welcome to the circus of freaks, they can't juggle, swallow swords or spit fire but they're masters of trickery
Warlocks of the dark arts, magicians of cannibalism, Issei Sagawa, how can we fight when they won't let us compete against them?
We're fighting a losing battle like me against the mainstream, commoners against the elite, like Narnia this cabinet was built on deceit
Platters licked clean, reflections inhumane, fact is scarier than fiction, Freddie Krauger versus John Wayne
Pause for a break in the action to play some party games, anybody up for a spot of follow the leader?
Back to your seats and conversation continues, wiping clean mouths with napkins the size of beach towels
The meeting is now so close to its close, impatience is setting in, desert is served to calm some of the tension
Alright, I've been told you can't right a wrong but I can write a wrong and I'm proof you can't wrong a Wright, so maybe we stand a chance against these martyrs after all if we fight
Where did our will go to survive?
As they're feasting on our tender flesh, peeling our skin like potato jackets and taking all that we have

Gathered at this banquet they have their discussion, there's no way we can pull the blinds away
And yet we eat what they say?

All i know is if you rachel one of their khoos you'll get AIDS
 

Excuse that last line, Im hoping we are grown up enough to handle that kind of thing.

 

So I just included some references and what they are, for interests sake but it also makes the lines make more sense. I might have missed some.

 

ISSEI SAGAWA: He was a Japanese guy who killed and ate his victims. He got out of jail (or maybe even didnt get convicted, can't remember). Then he made it famous as a food critic in Asia. It is messed up.

RACHELLING SOMEONES KHOO: Rachel Khoo is an English chef, she has a TV show. It just sounds kind of sexual so it might make the lyrics. I'm not about been a mainstream artist, underground all the way so some things I write might not be suitable for everyone. 

JOHN WAYNE GACY: Probably don't need to explain.

JUANITA NELSON: A reporter in Australia who dug up too much on the government years and years ago. Think it was Sydney. She disappeared and to this day her body hasn't been found.

JANE TYRRELL: Just a great Australian singer. I reference her a lot in my tracks. But thats what rap is all about.

THE WATCHER: In America this house got sold then the new owners got anonymous letters saying the house was watched and 'new blood was requested' and weird shit like that. Its a really interesting story, the address was 657 Boulevard and the new owners are currently in court over the matter.

 

Hope I didn't miss any or bore you all. Cheers for reading, big ups and hope to hear from you!

 

 

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