I have a track I've been working on for a while now, I'm stuck on where to go next. I'll add the lyrics below here and then I'll address what I'm going for and other relevant bits and pieces (references, what it's about etc)
So these are the lyrics so far. Verse 1 is almost finished but needs work with flow, some of it doesn't fit as of right now. Verse 2 is just a random assortment of lines at the moment and verse 3 is yet to be started.
Let society dictate our place in the world
Step by step, you don't have a say, just fit into the mould
Don't question anything you're told
May the unseen sculptor craft the perfect follower
I don't want to hear that shit, it is or isn't fair
Who would've thought we'd be compared to rabbits in a headlights glare?
A booby trapped planet causing this effect
As I stumble over tripwires borderlining the edges of being politically correct
I swear we're the exact same generic lego men
Clones with different hair colours, Moira Burton and Sherry Birkin
And, I reach for pen and paper in my car glove compartment
As the community evolves from Bedrock to the Skypad Apartments
VERSE 2 bits and pieces
Take your place in the line, just follow
Check out the expiry date stamped right beside your barcode
We aren't free, we're blinded by the dancing lights of a cinema screen
Trapped within a belief that was force fed down our family trees
I never thought we'd reach a time when there's more meaning in a Taylor Swift song than in our lives
There's a more striking resemblance between this world and RE than Dracula and Dom Sheed
In a society where distrust spreads like a disease and breeds like rats
How could communication not take the first hit?
I hate to say it but this isn't the good old days I hear so much about, we're living in the new age
If Annie was okay before in YEAR chances are we're now cowering under the same table
Yet mils apart in connection
Where the stranger is the symbol used for danger
Every stranger you converse with could be your murderer
I swear this world's mantra us work to the grave and obey
Lower the mask from their face youll see they have the face of the....
Sly hands shaped us
Are you really yourself? I don't think so
A society built on disrepair
Something about despair
Shaped by the sly hands of our predecessors
If everyone's the same how can anyone make a difference
This is the planet of great apes restrained in rusty chains, different is dangerous, that's why we're all the same
NOTE that alot of that verse 2 stuff is just ideas and mightn't be used. I have just copied that directly from my phone notes as it is so its a bit shorthand.
SO WHAT I'M AFTER...
A TITLE : At this stage its called Disease, as in its kind of a disease spreading through society that we tend to be distrustful of strangers and so don't often talk to someone unless we know them. Although I'd be interested in how many people agree with that statement.
When i started the track, i saw an add on TV about how we can't communicate anymore. Of course this was blamed on technology, but it got me thinking. I reckon it has more to do with how society has changed. The world has become a more dangerous place (?). I know my grandparents happily talked to strangers back 'in the day'. But now, to sit next to a stranger on a train would be seen as wierd and unwelcome (?). Or is it just me?
Anyway the lyrics ended up becoming a bit about the lack of our ability to be ourselves in a society that has a predetermined mould for how it wants us to be. I cover that theme a lot subconciously.
So yeah any lines or where to go nexts are kind of what I'm after. Thoughts welcome as well on lyrics so far.
MOIRA AND SHERRY: Resident Evil franchise characters. Look exactly the same with different hair colours. The bracket bit is a backing vocal.
SKYPAD APARTMENTS/BEDROCK: I think most people will get it, reference to old cartoons (before my time). One is set in the future amd the other the past. Flintstones and Jetsons.
RE is Resident Evil abbreviated.
DOM SHEED: An AFL player for West Coast Eagles. If you look at the right pictures of him or see him in TV on match day he looks like Dracula.
ANNIE: That was a reference to Michael Jacksons Smooth Criminal, may or may not use it.
Like I say alot of those notes for V2 will be discarded.
Think thats all. Keep up the good writing everyone, I'm enjoying reading all your work.