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jonie

February Lyric Contest

The February Lyric Contest is now open CLOSED for entries. See scoring instructions below. Please note an addition to the scoring qualifications.

Open theme (which means there is no provided theme)

Submission Rules:

Standard rules apply (you can read them in full HERE) but, in short, they are:

- Send your lyric to me (jonie) by Private Message before the end of Saturday February 19, 2011

- You must have 25 posts to enter.

- Lyrics must not have been posted on the Muse as a lyric or a song.

- Once submitted, I will allow you one chance to make a change to your lyric. (I know this is not usual, but I've often wished for the chance) The change must be PM'd to me within 24 hours of the original PM of your lyric. You may not change your lyric, once it is posted.

Scoring:

When the contest closes, I will provide a list of the lyrics and instructions on how to submit scores

- If you enter, you must provide a score or your own lyric will be disqualified.

- Vote for all lyrics except your own on a scale of 1 to 10, whole numbers only (any decimal places or half scores will be rounded down).

- Your lyric gets the average score you gave the others.

- To Be eligible to vote/score in a Muses Muse Lyric contest if you are not a contestant, you must have been an active member for at least 30 days and have a minimum of 10 posts within the previous month. Posts are not restricted to the Lyrics Feedback forum.

- Scores must be in by the end of Friday, February 25, 2011.

- Winners will be announced on Saturday, February 26, 2011.

Finally, a request to all voters. Please score in keeping with the spirit of the contest. Your votes should reflect not only how you feel a lyric stands up against the competition but how it stands up on its own. In other words, it is not in keeping with the spirit of the contest to isolate a favorite lyric by scoring it very high while scoring all other entries lower than they may deserve. You can find a good guide to scoring HERE

Here is a list of the lyrics to be scored:

Caroline

Safe and Sound

The Season’s Air

Samurai Smile

Don't Deny It

A Two Dollar Tear

True Love

I've Lost My Way

Paint My Picture

Limbo

Too Fine A Lady

Pretty Stories

Pick It Up and Start It Again

Cut and Run

The Lake

Faded Blue

Meet Me

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Caroline

Peter Pan

(verses)

We were students when I met her,

standin` her a coffee for a kiss and for a smile.

I can`t help me, my eyes`re always gettin` wetter

when I start just thinkin` of that time.

Open minded from conviction,

that was her, finding out what`s what since she was just twelve,

mysterious, quiet, full of contradictions,

but somehow logical for herself.

(chorus)

Caroline, oh, Caroline,

what`s this all about?

There`re things people sense (just) all the time,

but they do not say them loud.

Caroline, oh, Caroline,

I knew it all the time.

somehow.now we can cry or shout.

Caroline, oh, Caroline,

what`s this all about?

tell me, please, yes, tell me, please: what`s this all about?

(verses)

In those days we were a couple,

it was too late when I noticed the stab wounds in her leg,

I did not realize she was in big troubles

till I found that LSD and Crack..

I talked and fought, tried to save her,

whereas she dissociated more and more from me,

and strange, suspicious figures began to date her,

while payin` with Snow and THC.

She got the lover of the dealers,

then a prostitute, there`s no way out once when you are trapped,

I know, people say that time is a great healer,

excuse me, I cannot stand that crap.

Years ago when I advised her

she did not listen, you know, I met her recently

by case, in bad shape, I hardly recognized her,

she said calmly she got HIV.

(chorus)

Caroline, oh, Caroline,

what`s this all about?

There`re things people sense (just) all the time,

but they do not say them loud.

Caroline, oh, Caroline,

I knew it all the time.

somehow. now we can cry or shout.

Caroline, oh, Caroline,

what`s this all about?

tell me, please, yes, tell me, please: what`s this all about?

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Safe and Sound

AndyLef

Verse 1

There’s a kind old lady knitting

looking through her window pane

Spending days, months, years and sighs

trav’ling winding mem’ry lanes

She sees a girl and the boy next door

feels their hand in hand

Unafraid of the path they take

it’s their future to command

Chorus

Inside she’s still that little girl

from all those years ago

Still hearing school ground laughter

feeling thrill of new laid snow

Reliving all the hopes and tears

with fam’ly close around

And though those times are distant now

Inside they’re safe and sound

Safe and sound

Verse 2

There’s a cat upon the window sill

and a clock chimes on the side

The fire’s cold in the grate now but

pride cloaks the cold she hides

Then as she nods and falls asleep

smiles lingers on her lips

And a ball of wool rolls to the floor

from between her finger tips

Chorus

Inside she’s still that little girl

from all those years ago

Still hearing school ground laughter

feeling thrill of new laid snow

Reliving all the hopes and tears

with fam’ly close around

And though those times are distant now

Inside they’re safe and sound

Safe and sound

Break

Across the room her photographs

Smiling faces watch over her

They’re on their guard and they never sleep

In their likeness she looks out too

Over you (over you, over you, over you)

Chorus

Inside she’s still that little girl

from all those years ago

Still hearing school ground laughter

feeling thrill of new laid snow

Reliving all the hopes and tears

with fam’ly close around

And though those times are distant now

Inside they’re safe and sound

Safe and sound

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The Season’s Air

Stewart Alexander

In the winter days I feel

Time is just a way to heal

In the winter nights I see

The glorious moon my love is she

In the spring morn I hear

My birds my friends are home and near

In the spring her evening days

Summer rings he’s on his way

For I am lost

Till I can taste

All colours in

The season’s air

My mind takes turns

From joy to hurt

What can I do

But stop to stare

Summer fills the grass and ground

Such warmth can friend the fox and hound

The fall my autumn friend has come

Within rain my dad and mum

For I am lost

Till I can taste

All colours in

The season’s air

My mind takes turns

From joy to hurt

What can I do

But stop to stare

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Samurai Smile

starsinmyeyes

V1

She's one controlled 24 year old

Her movements so clear and precise

Admit I'm sold on her heart of gold

And her twenty four carat eyes

V2

I'm almost dead when she turns her head

And removes me from her sight

Right or wrong I'll take her on

If she'll go a few rounds tonight.

PC

She never mentions love

Just engagement and defeat...

C

First she gets me hopin

That she might cut me open

Then she'll slice me nicely with her Samurai Smile

Her honour is her word

There's no need for a sword

When she can slice me nicely with her Samurai Smile.

V3

Both exotic and intelligent

She keeps to a strict regime

She learns Musashi's wisdom,

Recites the Book of Five Rings

PC

She never mentions love

Just engagement and defeat..

C

She hooks me with that look

And guts me with that strut

Then she'll slice me nicely with her Samurai Smile

Her honour is her word

She won't remove her sword

When she can slice me nicely with her Samurai Smile.

Bridge

Her mind's an enlightened forge, her skill in war is prized

She has no natural fear of death, but mine's there in her eyes

Yeah, mine's there in her eyes...

C

First she'll get me hopin

She might cut me open

Then she'll slice me nicely with her Samurai Smile

Her honour is her word

She don't need a sword

When she can slice me nicely with her Samurai Smile.

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DON'T DENY IT

RKG

There's a feeling on the streets

See it in the people that you meet

Don't deny it, you want a riot

Don't deny it, you want to riot

Pressure building up inside

There is nowhere left for it to hide

Don't deny it, you want a riot

Don't deny it, you want to riot

Politicians take the throne

They're not going to leave us alone

Don't deny it, you want a riot

Don't deny it, you want to riot

Don't deny it, you want a riot

Don't' deny it, you want to riot

Things have got to change

Before everyone's deranged

Don't deny it, you want a riot

Don't deny it, you want to riot

Don't deny it, you want a riot

Don't deny it, you want to riot

Come on

Lets

Get it together now

Don't deny it, you want a riot

Don't deny it, you want to riot

Don't deny it, you want a riot

Don't deny it, you want to riot

Don't deny it, your want a riot

Don't deny it, you want to riot

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A Two Dollar Tear

no future

She gave me a look, I answered with a smile

But she was begging for help with her eyes

Since several years, finding comfort in her despair, life gave up on her

And after several beers, in Riga’s bus terminus she slowly wanders

Silently waiting for the winter cold to remove her pain and feel much better

She doesn’t eat, wishing for her hunger to die; where to go now? She still wonders

Her face was red as fire

I gave her some coins; she thanked me with a tear

That’s all she had to offer but she was sincere

(Chorus)

A tear of happiness because she got what she asked for

And a tear of sadness because it was surely not enough

A new life and a home are dreams she cannot afford

Forever waiting for the next bus which will never stop

Without wasting a moment, bent and broken, she proudly walked to the closest store

And to my discontent, she left with another beer she swallowed as syrup

Relief doesn’t imply recovery; it’s the alcohol that’s subtly consuming her

Selling her dignity to forget how she lost it, now she just doesn’t give a ****

Her hands were white as snow now, I got duped

(Bridge)

(A two-dollar tear) For a moment, this made her feel warmer

(A two-dollar tear) But after a while, it freezes and feels colder

(A two-dollar tear) And it won’t dry so next time she’ll remember

(A two-dollar tear) What she did when she’ll look in the mirror

(Chorus)

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True Love

Midway

V1

You fell in love too blindly

Not caring where you’d land

Until it all was over

Much sooner than you planned

You had to learn the hard way

The rules to Cupid’s game

And after your first heartbreak

Were never quite the same

CH

First love

Unrehearsed love

Is the worst love by design

Because true love

Bolt from the blue love

Is a love few ever find

V2

You packed your pride and moved on

A little worse for wear

And when you found a new love

Had something to compare

When promises were traded

You held back all you had

In case the whole thing ended

It would not hurt so bad

CH

Next love

More complex love

Still affects your peace of mind

Because true love

Bolt from the blue love

Is a love few ever find

BR

You can drive yourself to utter madness

Searching for love’s reason and love’s rhyme

But if you’re truly wise

You’ll stop and close your eyes

And beg for love to fool you one more time

V3

You finally decided

To give love one last chance

You boldly walked on over

And asked her for a dance

Hearts beating with the music

In tempo bar for bar

She resurrected hope again

And healed those ancient scars

CH

Last love

Unsurpassed love

Will stand fast as years unwind

Because true love

Bolt from the blue love

Is a love few ever find

Oh yes, true love

Bolt from the blue love

Is a love few ever find

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I've Lost My Way

graybeard

Verse 1

She left me in April

On a day that it rained

Felt like a fool

But I didn’t complain

Verse 2

Helped her load her things

Into her old Chevrolet

Showed no distress

As she was driving away

Verse 3

But when I got back inside

Emotions imploded

Took me on a ride

Down a dark lonely road

Chorus

I should have known

I should’ve begged her to stay

These weeks alone

I’ve lost my way

I’ve lost my way

Bridge

Back into her arms

Send me directions

Sound an alarm

I need protection

Chorus

I should have known

I should’ve begged her to stay

These weeks alone

I’ve lost my way

I’ve lost my way

Tag

What can I say?

I’ve lost my way

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Paint My Picture

crazypoet

That guy by the bar is looking at everyone else but me

I wish I was the only girl in this room that he could see

When I leave this bar

he’ll take a different car

Although I wish we’d share this night

in my dreams I’ll be the star

(Pre ch.)

I’ll paint my picture with colors so bright

on a canvas of white

(Ch.)

Layer number one is my past

It won’t last

Layer number two is today

It won’t stay

But layer number three is the real me

the one I’ll be

when I paint my picture

This girl that I work with is always looking smoking hot

I wish I was a bit like her with all that confidence she’s got

She’s like a beauty queen

that you see on the screen

But when I get home and turn off the light

then it’s me who will be seen

(Pre ch.)

I’ll paint my picture with colors so bright

on a canvas of white

(Ch.)

Layer number one is my past

It won’t last

Layer number two is today

It won’t stay

But layer number three is the real me

the one I’ll be

when I paint my picture

(Br.)

I’ll shine through the darkness

like a meteor shower

and strut my stuff

as the girl of the hour

(Pre ch.)

I’ll paint my picture with colors so bright

on a canvas of white

(Ch.)

Layer number one is my past

It won’t last

Layer number two is today

It won’t stay

But layer number three is the real me

the one I’ll be

when I paint my picture

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Limbo

feegis

Lord, you brought a good woman into my life

And I know she deserves to be a good man’s wife

And when we started I thought that’s where we would go

But I lost something and now it seems so hard to know

(chorus)

Lord, let me love her or let me leave her

I don’t want to put her through this anymore

The hell of life in limbo

Will I stay or will I go

Let me leave or let me have the feeling I had before

I know the greatest feeling in life truly does exist

Once you feel it, it’s the hardest feeling to resist

But once you have it and it’s gone, does it ever come back

Having to walk away from gold can freeze you in your tracks

(chorus)

Holding on for fear, holding on for hope

Either way I’m putting her through hell

I always thought of myself as a decent man

But lately, Lord, lately I can’t tell

Two years in and I’ve never asked her to be mine

And I don’t feel like much of a man straddling the line

They say that when in doubt, you should do without

Maybe this is something I shouldn’t have to think about

(chorus)

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Too Fine A Lady

Alistair S

I am a roughhouse boy.

I am a tinker’s son.

I have no money saved.

I have one suit of clothes,

A good knife and a gun.

I’d take a walk with her

If she would walk with me,

I’d change myself into

Who she needs me to be,

I’d take a chance with her

If she’d give me a sign,

But she’s too a fine a lady ever to be … mine.

There’ll be no wedding bells.

There’ll be no blushing bride.

There’ll be no singing choirs.

The day will never come

She’ll lay down by my side.

(But)

I’d take a ride with her

If she would ride with me.

I’d turn her life around

And set her spirit free.

I’d take a chance with her

If she’d give me a sign,

But she’s too a fine a lady ever to be … mine.

I own the sky, but not the land beneath my feet.

I own the future but the past still has me beat.

I own a flame and I can build a blazing fire.

I’ve downed a drink or two and have but one desire …

To have my way with her,

To have her want the same,

To feel my hands on her

As she cries out my name.

I’d take a chance with her

If she’d give me a sign,

But she’s too a fine a lady ever to be … mine.

(And)

There’ll be no wedding bells.

There’ll be no blushing bride.

There’ll be no singing choirs.

The day will never come

She’ll lay down by my side.

For she’s too a fine a lady ever to be mine.

She’s too a fine a lady ever to be … mine.

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PRETTY STORIES

scubed

Don't think I'm foolish

Don't think I'm blind

I'm only asking for you to be kind

Don't give me insight

Don't get too deep

Just tell me something to help me to sleep

Tell me Pretty Stories

Tell me they're true

Don't paint me darkness

Don't sing me blue

Tell me Pretty Stories

End with a smile

Maybe I'll believe you

For a while

I remember the days

Of my sure-footed youth

Eager to reach out and handle the truth

Now I see what I see

And I know what I know

And I carry it with me wherever I go

Tell me Pretty Stories

Tell me they're true

Don't paint me darkness

Don't sing me blue

Tell me Pretty Stories

End with a smile

Maybe I'll believe you

For a while

Bridge:

Just for awhile let's pretend

That things will somehow be all right in the end

Tell me tomorrow

We'll see better days

Tell me life works in mysterious ways

'Cause it's all falling down

And I'm falling apart

Just tell me something to unbreak my heart

Tell me Pretty Stories

Tell me they're true

Don't paint me darkness

Don't sing me blue

Tell me Pretty Stories

End with a smile

Maybe I'll believe you

For a while

Maybe I'll believe you

For a while

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Pick It Up and Start It Again

MrFitz

She stood there teary eyed

wondering what was going on

I said its over

and its time we started moving along

she watched and waited

wondering if I was gonna laugh

but i showed her the door

and waited for the aftermath

Dont blame me I dont know better

through the window can see her hair getting wetter

Im not a monster and I had to let her back in

and tried to explain myself

If its broke dont fix it (things are probably better that way)

If its ripped ill mend it (Doesnt mean Im gonna stay)

But when i get so tired (i cant help thinking that)

I'll just start again (pick it up and start it again)

Pick It Up and Start It Again

I said just listen

things arent gonna work out

Im just so screwed up

and you arent helping out

She said we could try

and I said its really no use

It made her angry

and I got ready for the abuse

Dont blame me I dont know better

shes angry i shouldnt of upset her

shes got that look of crazy in her eye

ive awkwardly done it again

If its broke dont fix it (things are probably better that way)

If its ripped ill mend it (Doesnt mean Im gonna stay)

But when i get so tired (i cant help thinking that)

I'll just start again (pick it up and start it again)

Pick It Up and Start It Again

She said I should

She Said I Should

She said I should go

Then she threw the vase down

and the flowers went everywhere

I saw a rainbow

in the shards on my living room chairs

It was then i knew

that she meant what shes gonna say

and im not the kinda man

to ever stand in her way

Dont blame me I dont know better

She started crying and her eyes got redder

and as she stormed out i cant help thinking

things are probably better this way

If its broke dont fix it (things are probably better that way)

If its ripped ill mend it (Doesnt mean Im gonna stay)

But when i get so tired (i cant help thinking that)

I'll just start again (pick it up and start it again)

Pick It Up and Start It Again

Pick It Up and Start It Again

Pick It Up and Start It Again

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Cut and Run

kimberlyinnc

I paid allegiance to Uncle Sam

But one tour in ‘Nam didn’t impress my old man

A lifetime Marine; I was long haired freak

Playing Country Joe, marching in the streets

So, I gave sister a kiss, and my hi-fi stereo

Hopped on my Harley rode ‘er fast as she’d go

I cut and run

Chorus

I had no map, had no plan

Just a rucksack of canned spam

An old tin pot and pinto beans

Without any reign on me

I cut and run

Stopped for gas and smokes on 95

My ex, Caroline was there buying Boone’s Farm wine

She hadn’t changed though her kind eyes looked so sad

Dad hung himself in jail, was all she had

So we split a chili dog, and talked over a few beers

But when she said she missed me after all these years

I cut and run

Worked the carnivals on the west coast

Luring sticky fingered kids to lose at bottle throw

After the lights and sounds went down, I’d see dad’s face

‘til I’d find a chick, party until day

I won some bread playing poker, but lost it rolling dice

But before losing another tooth in a fight

I cut and run

Chorus

I had no map, had no plan

Just a rucksack of canned spam

An old tin pot and pinto beans

Without any reign on me

I cut and run

Bridge

Was planting trees in Tennessee, when I got the call

Sissy cried “Daddy’s dying, please come back home”

What could I say? He was my dad, I was his son

And it’s be said you can always go home

So, I cut and run

Chorus

I had no map, had no plan

Just a rucksack of canned spam

An old tin pot and pinto beans

Without any reign on me

I cut and run

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The Lake

John Paragreen

Giant blades spin in the wind

Producing electricity

And the politicians proclaim

That this is clean energy,

But some farmers in China

Stand sullen faced

Their once fertile land

Is a lake of toxic waste.

The furnaces near Baotou

They burn day and night

Producing rare earth metals

To feed our green appetite,

Each magnet we install

In every turbine

Adds more chemical junk

To the lake of septic slime.

chorus

Bubbling and hissing

Poisoning the land and the air,

The lake paints a picture

Of apocalyptic despair.

On the crust near the shore

Children used to play

Some drowned in the sludge

When the surface gave way,

Now guards patrol the lake

All five miles wide

When money's at stake

Values get swept aside.

chorus

Bubbling and hissing

Poisoning the land and the air,

The lake paints a picture

Of apocalyptic despair.

bridge

Standing by my window sill

I see a wind farm on the distant hill

But I don't think of green energy,

My head starts to shake

As I think of the Baotou lake

And how selfish mankind can be.

chorus

Bubbling and hissing

Poisoning the land and the air,

The lake paints a picture

Of apocalyptic despair.

bridge 2

I wonder how many lakes we'll create

Oh but maybe I'm thinking too far

But I know we'll need lots of magnets

When we mass produce the electric car.

chorus

Bubbling and hissing

Poisoning the land and the air,

The lake paints a picture

Of apocalyptic despair.

The lake paints a picture

Of apocalyptic despair.

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Faded Blue

Gordon

How many times did I write her in class?

It seems so clear; could so much time have passed?

Once we laughed and made angels in the snow

Tossed snowballs at icicles, breaking a window or two

Skating on the pond out behind the school

Catching each other whenever we slipped

Now I watch the hands of the clock marking the hours

While I nurse a drink amidst our wilting flowers

And her yellowed fingertips cling to her day’s last smoke

Once upon a time she used to smile

Perhaps someday it’ll come back in style

But for now we just sit here, each alone

Immersed in the stale stench of cigarettes

And our memories faded blue

How many times did I sing her my songs?

I wonder between the clock’s hollow gongs

Once we laughed and ran barefoot in the grass

We rolled in the soft clover, searching for a little luck

Racing to the pond out behind the school

Stripping off our jeans to probe its cool depths

Now we lie in our bed, basking in the TV’s glow

Another day’s passage marked by growing shadow

Leno makes me laugh, but only silence leaves my lips

It seems there’s something I used to say

Maybe I will again someday

But for now I’ll just lie here quietly

Wrapped in the stale stench of cigarettes

And our blankets faded blue

How many times did I kiss her goodnight?

Embracing underneath the faint starlight

Once we strolled to the crickets’ serenade

While holding each other’s hand, the warmest security

Passing by the pond out behind the school

Pausing to skip a stone and make a wish

Now in the silence of our room, flowers never bloom

And gray clouds gather here, enshroud us in their gloom

The lamplight flickers low as we settle down to sleep

I wish there was more that could be done

It seems there’s nothing left that’s fun

So I turn to whisper in her ear

But notice her pale skin so much paler

And her soft lips faded blue

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Meet Me

Wendy D

Meet me, here

On this night so clear

And watch..

as the stars

fall out of the sky

Pull me, tight

At the falling of light

Kiss me..

be with me

As you whisper

goodbye

As the moon starts to fall

And flames burn the world

As empires break down

And the void comes unfurled

Stand with me..

On the edge of this knife

And love me,

Don't leave me..

At the end of this life

When, we must go

Find your way

to my soul

I will be here

At the end

of all tears

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Time to vote.

Please see post #1 for scoring details and a list of the lyrics.

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