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Neal K

June Lyric Writing Comp

The June Lyric writing contest is now open for entries. Same rules as always (you can read them in full here) but in short they are:

- Send your lyrics to me by PM before the end of the June 8.

- You must have 25 posts to be able to enter

- Lyrics must not have been posted on the Muse before or in the same month's song contests

How & when to provide scores:

- When the contest closes, I will provide a list of the songs and instructions on how to submit scores

- If you enter, you must provide a score

- Vote for all lyrics except your own on a scale of 1 to 10

- Your scores must be whole numbers. No half numbers.

- Your lyric gets the average score you gave the others

- Scores must be in by the end of June 15

Neal

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Do You Dream

Just because it feels so right doesn't mean it's wrong

If it isn't logical why does it feel so strong

I don't believe in fairy tales Santa Clause or Mother Goose

I believe in love the way I feel and making dreams come true

Are you holding back now... hiding the way you care

Is it mixed emotions... or something in the air

You say you've always loved him... he's all you've ever dreamed

When you're dreaming lately...do you dream about me

When I close my eyes to sleep your picture fills my mind

I know it may sound crazy but it's been there all my life

Ever since the moment that I first laid eyes on you

The dream I've lived with all my life has started to come true

Are you holding back now... hiding the way you care

Is it mixed emotions... or something in the air

You say you've always loved him... he's all you've ever dreamed

When you're dreaming lately...do you dream about me

Do you dream about me... when you close your eyes

Do you dream about me... deep into the night

When you're on your pillow... who is it that you see

When you close your eyes... do you dream about me

Should I stay or should I go... I don't know what to do

You tell me you're in love with him... but I'm in love with you

You say "I haven't known you long enough to be in love"

To show you all my love forever... isn't long enough

Are you holding back now... hiding the way you care

Is it mixed emotions... or something in the air

You say you've always loved him... he's all you've ever dreamed

When you're dreaming lately...do you dream about me

Do you dream about me... when you close your eyes

Do you dream about me... deep into the night

When you're on your pillow... who is it that you see

When you close your eyes... do you dream about me

Do you dream about me... when you close your eyes

Do you dream about me... deep into the night

When you're on your pillow... who is it that you see

When you close your eyes... do you dream about me

Do you dream about me do you dream about me

Do you dream about me do you dream about me

Do you dream about me do you dream about me

When you close your eyes...do you dream about me

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Locked Up

V1

I got locked up standing

on a cold and lonely street

I got locked up standing

on a beat we're supposed to meet

At the time I shouldn't mind being someone you couldn't find

At the time I shouldn'ta mind being someone you couldn'ta find

Chorus

But I'm disinclined

to be in a bind

Put me behind

aligned somewhere the sun don't shine.

I got locked up!

I got locked up!

V2

I got locked up waiting

For our sweet love to be defined

I got locked up waiting

For a cloud that was silver-lined

Half the time I didn't mind being someone you couldn't find

Half the time I didn'ta mind being someone you couldn'ta find

Chorus

But I'm disinclined

to be in a bind

And put behind

aligned somewhere the sun don't shine.

Ahh I got locked up!

Ahh I got locked up!

Ahh I got locked up!

Ahh I got locked up!

Find you're the kind

to be in a bind

Leave you behind

It's a sign that my mind is fine

Ahh I got locked up!

Ahh I got locked up!

Ahh I got locked up!

Love locked me up!

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Barney

Verse 1

An old man was all most people saw

When they looked at him

Security guard at a shopping mall

On the shady side of town

Local thugs nicknamed him Barney

Like the deputy with a gun

Gangsters can be ornery

Barney let them have their fun

Chorus

A .38 revolver,

Flashlight, and nightstick

Retired Special Forces

Barney knew a few tricks

Verse 2

He protected patrons and workers

At an all-night laundry mat

Barney carried out his orders

Duty with honor’s what he was about

Gangs ruled the back allies

Cruised the streets in land yachts

Barney walked his short beat

Took care of his small spot

Chorus

A .38 revolver

Flashlight and nightstick

Retired Special Forces

Barney knew a few tricks

Verse 3

One night a desperate young outlaw

High on whiskey & white rock

Tried to hijacked a patron

Down on Barney’s short block

Thug pulled his nine and fired a shot

We expected more hot lead to pour

But Barney used his nightstick

To quickly settle the score

Chorus

A .38 revolver

Flashlight and nightstick

Retired Special Forces

Barney knew a few tricks

Bridge

When the squad cars arrived

Sirens blaring in the night

Barney’s patron was okay

The thug was out like a light

Chorus

A .38 revolver

Flashlight and nightstick

Retired Special Forces

Barney knew a few tricks

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There Beside You

I’m there beside you

I’m the passion that stirs you

You think you feel me

But you’re unsure

Chorus:

I’m there beside you

In the cover of night

I’m there beside you

I’m your shadow in the light

You breathe me in

And taste my desire

I satisfy your hunger

You feed my soul

Chorus:

I’m there beside you

In the cover of night

I’m there beside you

I’m your shadow in the light

I’m the candlelight that guides you

I’m there in the distance

You exhale and I dance upon your breathe

Chorus:

I’m there beside you

In the cover of night

I’m there beside you

I’m your shadow in the light

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LIFE IS A SONG

When you reach the crossroads

To ask which way to go,

Its known to few, but often true

Theres no one there to know.

If ever help arrives,

It's a friend who knows the way,

Such delight, the end's in sight,

Its your lucky day.

Youre nearing a town where life is a song,

And everyone feels connection.

Life without it, as some of you know,

Has a totally different complexion.

As all the world knows,

No one like exclusion.

In this town all made of music

Youll find theres less confusion.

Wherever you go a sign will show

Where writers went before you,

Where they stopped , where they shopped,

Where no one will ignore you.

And if you need a hand,

All will understand.

Youll find they spring to action

To give you satisfaction.

It does feel good to have rounded the corner

Of" where do I go From here" Street.

To find yourself walking down closer to town

To "now I can see the way clear" street.

So follow in the footsteps

Of all who went before you

And you will reach the neighborhood

Of Everyone will adore you".

Once youre there, I swear youll stare

Into so many happy faces,

In a line so long, each with a song,

With music that embraces.

But never enter Confusion

At the other side of town or

Song lines will crumble ,

While you sit and grumble.

So settle down at

This end of town

And lose your frown at last,

And dont go back to the crossroads

no matter who should ask.

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Don't Wait Up For Me

V1:

They're turning off the lights

And Joe’s done wiping down the bar

The waitress waves good night

As she heads out to her car

The owner understands

And tosses me the extra key

There's been a change in plans

So Honey, don't wait up for me

V2:

I’m always at my best

In a secluded atmosphere

Can’t get things off my chest

With you whisp’ring in my ear

It's hard to concentrate

Sometimes I need the privacy

To help me meditate

So Honey, don't wait up for me

Ch:

Don't wait up for me, 'cause I'm not coming home again

I'll pass the longing hours with my guitar and my pen

And if the mood is right I'll find the perfect melody

To play all through the night, so Honey, don't wait up for me

V3:

Now I've known for some time

You think I’m seeing someone new

You’ll break down when you find

A new love song just for you

The perfect words to write

Don’t always fall out of the trees

I'm working late tonight

So Honey, don't wait up for me

Ch:

Don't wait up for me, 'cause I'm not coming home again

I'll pass the longing hours with my guitar and my pen

And if the mood is right, I'll find the perfect melody

To play all through the night, so Honey, don't wait up for me

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Don’t Be Afraid (To Lose A Loser)

Mary’s on the corner of 6th and Main

Can’t find cover from the pouring rain

She’s waiting for Jim, he’s late again

She won’t dare ask him where he’s been

Jim drives up, lays on the horn

Mary jumps, her nerves are torn

He offers up not one regret

Except that she’s getting the seat wet

She knows what it gets her if she ever puts him to task

Another threat to leave her if she even starts to ask

Well, hey, Mary

(chorus)

Don’t be afraid to lose a loser

Stop giving him all his excuses

“He’s just stressed”

“He works so hard”

“He would have come.......”

If his boulevard weren’t so jammed

With all his broken dreams

Don’t be afraid to lose a loser

It’s not as scary as it seems

Mary’s never been on her own

Except all the times when Jim gets stoned

She can’t seem to cut her losses

But what would she lose but double crosses

And promises that always sink like stone

It’s been three years, they’ve found their rut

Mary’s put in place when she speaks up

This is the life she seems to choose

Playing a hand she’s sure to lose

Is it fear or comfort in the same old sights and sounds

That has Mary holding on to the thing that holds her down

Well, hey, Mary

(chorus)

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A Night like That

A swirl of fog caressed the lamp posts

On the streets of Manhattan

Inside a lone saxophone seduced us

With Coltrane, and Braxton

She wore a red carnation

In her black satin hair

And she stirred something in me

with her shy, yet beguiling stare

Have you ever had a night like that?

Have you ever had a night like that?

We moved like any couple would

Consumed with the heat of love

And danced so close there was barely room

For the air between us

Her touch gave me the courage

To ask for a kiss

And our times from that night on

were magical moments like this

Chorus

Have you ever had a night you wanted to linger on?

One you wanted to go on and on and on

Into forever and forever after that…

Have you ever had a night like that?

When my hourglass starts running low

of its final grains of sand

I can say with certainty

I can die a happy man

I was wise enough to know

that a love as good as this

hasn’t graced every heart that beats

proving heaven exists

Have you ever had a night you wanted to linger on?

One you wanted to go on and on and on

Into forever and forever after that…

Have you ever had a night like that?

Have you ever had a night like that?

Have you ever had a night like that?

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Got My Eye on Nashville

I got this ole guitar and at least a dozen songs

Three jobs and a mortgage

But I ain’t going home

I’m headed up to Tennessee to see if I belong

I got my eye on Nashville

Got my Stetson on

Now I know it’s a gamble, got three kids and a wife

Two jobs I don’t want

One I wanna make my life

I’ll mosey up to Tennessee beneath them neon lights

I got my eye on Nashville

Got music on my mind

Chorus

Look out Nashville Tennessee

Howdy there Hank, Dunn and Chesney

I like my music, country

My boots are scoot’n to Tennessee

The uhaul’s overloaded, everything we own

Kids fight’n in the minivan

Wife, she won’t come on

I’m Tennessee bound and hoping I ain’t wrong

I got my eye on Nashville

Pick’n country songs

It’s been brutal ride down the highway to my dreams

Broke down on I-75

Ain’t where I wanna be

But I’m just 300 miles this side of Tennessee

I got my eye on Nashville

Nashville’s got its eye on me

Chorus

Look out Nashville Tennessee

Howdy there Hank, Dunn and Chesney

I like my music, country

My boots are scoot’n to Tennessee

I got my eye on Nashville

I got my eye on Nashville, Tennessee

I got my eye on Nashville

Nashville’s got its eye on me

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KNOCK ME OUT

She’s my greatest inspiration

Lights the brightest constellations

In my sea of tranquility

Shadow of her ability

To knock me out

Knock me out

She knocks me out

We toppled thru the autumn leaves

Laughing out as the tempest breathes

Winter came on so suddenly

No time to stop the world for me

The plans we made were etched in stone

There with me now I’m not alone

Even though she is far away

Longing for all those autumn days

To knock me out

Knock me out

She knocks me out

A letter came for me today

I never thought that she would say

The end has come for both of us

It all comes down to broken trust

Lost all her will and her power

To stave off the darkest hours

Of loneliness and temperaments

And sorry but she never meant

To knock me out

Knock me out

She knocks me out

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The contest is now closed for entries.... let the voting begin!!!

All members are allowed to score the lyrics; all contestants must provide scores or their lyric will be disqualified. Its the law!

- Vote for all lyrics except your own on a scale of 1 to 10

- No half marks. Your score must be a whole number

- Your lyric gets the average score you gave the others

Please PM me your votes by June 15. The winners will be announced on the 16th.

Here are the songs:

Do You Dream

Locked Up

Barney

There Beside You

Life is a Song

Don't Wait Up For Me

Don't Be Afraid (to lose a loser)

A Night Like That

Got My Eye On Nashville

Knock Me Out

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We have our winners for this month's contest.

1st Place, with 79 points:

Don't Wait Up For Me

By Midway

2nd Place, with 74 points

A Night Like That

By Kimberlyinnc

3rd Place, with 69 points

Got My Eye on Nashville

By Dottie

Thanks to everyone who entered, with special thanks to the non-participants who provided scores: RPG, Jonie, and SIB.

Here is the list of the lyrics, and who wrote them:

Do You Dream - Dannyk1

Locked Up - Starsinmyeyes

Barney - Graybeard

There Beside You - Just the Words

Life is a Song - MusefromMichigan

Don't Wait Up For Me - Midway

Don't Be Afraid (to lose a loser) - feegis

A Night Like That - Kimberlyinnc

Got My Eye On Nashville - Dottie

Knock Me Out - RKG

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Congrats Midway on a great song!!

Kim, congrats on another great song!

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Congrats to the winners!!

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:):D:lol::D:):P:DB)

Congrats to Midway and Dottie :D:)

It is super cool to see newer lyricists/musers enter and do well in the contest.

My personal Favorites were...

I had tied for First---Life is a Song and Don't be Afraid to lose a loser. The Life is a song, I felt it told a unique story, with some teachings in it as well. I was pleasantly surprised to see that Annie (musefrommichigan) had penned it..Nice lyric Annie! I hope you will put some music to this one. :)

The lyric Don't be Afraid to Lose a Loser by Feegis, whom I am not real familiar with as he is not on the site much, I liked. It had a decent message to it, and with the right music could work.

If anyone puts their lyrics from the contest on the critique forum I will share more thoughts I have about them... if you want to hear them... :lol as I hope you will do with my lyric as well.:

I had tied for 2nd place--Dottie's song and Don't wait up for me, Midway...

Do You Dream --Danny, -I felt this was very sentimental, and I liked it a lot

Got My Eye On Nashville --Dottie, it is good to see your writing as it keeps getting better and better on the structure, content, flow. You have always been open to make changes and re-writes, to offer crits. to others and always do it in a kind and helpful manner. I am very proud of you.

Again, some very nice lyrics this month from each participant. Thank you Neal for running it and adding up the scores. (which I would like to see mine, if you don't plan to post it publically) :)

Don't wait up for me- Midway--very nice but I did have a few questions on the meanings..I will bring that up on the forum if you post it:)

and....Thank you to the ones who voted for my lyrical attempt... A Night Like That...I was pleased that it placed...thank you very much~~ :) I will be posting it in the lyrical critique for comments, so I can improve it...any help is appreciated. :)

.

Kimberlyinnc

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Wow! I go out of town on business for a few days and come back home an award winning auteur. :blink: How soon 'till I receive my check and knick-knack for my trophy shelf? ... Huh? What's that? I don't get... Oh! Nevermind. B)

Well, thanks to everyone who scored me high enough to put a dent in the outcome. I really wasn't expecting it, especially against my top 3 picks (in order):

A Night Like That - Good one Kim. Anyone who can work a reference to Coltrane into a song is doing something right.

There Beside You - Shellie, "You exhale and I dance upon your breathe" just slayed me. I can hear that one as just a vocal with a slight echo floating above a single piano pulsing with thin chords, hypnotizing the listener. Ooooh!! Are those goose bumps? Why, yes. Yes they are.

Got My Eye On Nashville - Dottie pulls another one out of her hat that I wish I had thought of first.

Tough competition. I was just lucky this time.

Peace,

J.

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You're too humble, Midway. Your lyric was far and away the deserved winner, in my book. Very well written. Congrats.

Congratulations also to Kim and Dottie for two good entries. I agree, it is nice to see those fairly new to the site entering contests and getting recognition. And 10 lyrics! It wasn't that long ago the lyric contest was only drawing 3 maybe 4 lyrics a month. Good to see such a large showing.

I had "Don't Wait Up For Me" out in front with "A Night Like That" and "Locked Up" tied for second.

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Great Job Midway, Kim, and Dottie. Really good stuff. I am pleased to see you guys at the top of the heap. Congrats all around!

Danny

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Well done, Midway!

I never got around to voting in this one but, had I done so, there was one, clear winner that was way out in front of the rest. That was "Don't Wait Up For Me". I'm glad it won :)

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