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lyD

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  • Birthday 11/13/1985

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  1. I enjoyed this. The music is well put together (wish my rough tracks sounded like that!) and I thought the understated, slightly awkward vocals worked for the most part. There were a few places where they didn't quite fit for me - "the world is just a stage/everybody's miscast" felt rushed, for example - but that might just be the vocal take. I have no idea what the lyrics mean, but they sounded good! I'm trying to think who it reminds me of. I'll come back if I remember! (Edit: I think I was thinking of Darwin Deez. Or maybe the Spinto Band. Anyway - I like it!)
  2. Hi Blazas I enjoyed this - I thought the "rough" (in a good way) vocals in particular took it away from being just another blues song, and reminded me of some 90s rock bands. Love the lead playing and harmonica as well. I wasn't convinced by the drums - there's nothing particularly wrong to them, but they just felt a bit forced in places (although I noticed it on the second listen when I was looking for things to comment on!). I'm certainly not a drummer, though, and if they're programmed they're done better than anything I could manage...
  3. Coming Home by David Butler (lyD) I've been working all night again I know you miss me so I miss you too; I wish you knew It's time I let you know I'm coming home I don't want to be The kind of man you see At forty-five, barely alive Wondering where the hell I've been I'm coming home It's not easy on your own Girl believe me, you're not alone I'm coming home I've been working all night again And now it's time to say I've had enough of treating love As something that's in the way I'm coming home It's not easy playing games Girl believe me, you're not a price I'll pay I'm coming home I've been working all night again I know you miss me so Well it's time I turned this whole thing around And made my way back home I'm coming home
  4. Alistair I've just managed to check in having received Jodi's email a few days ago, and you've already managed this. Yet again, thanks for giving up your time and taking charge! I'm not sure I would ever have recorded a song if I hadn't found this place. I stumbled upon the Muse while in an internet cafe in Brazil on a gap year, having developed a curiosity after passing the long bus journeys by writing songs in a notebook. At that time I had never picked up a guitar. I think having a potential audience like this gave me the motivation and confidence to put something out there, so I'm hugely grateful to Jodi for that. Now I'd better get back in the game! Dave
  5. Coming to this a bit late, but I think Ron's suggestion is a good one. Let everyone submit a lyric, and leave the musicians to decide which lyric they want to use. I suppose the down side of that is that we don't get to hear a variety of takes on the same lyric (although we might, if people pick the same lyric). So, erm, I don't know. But I like the idea of the contest whichever rules are used
  6. I must admit, I read the discussion in a hurry and managed to make my earlier reply without even realising an argument had taken place!
  7. Funny you mention this. I generally try to avoid posting songs for feedback around the same time as a contest. This one was a bit different, as I actually recorded this song to put on a CD for my Dad for his Christmas present. I wanted to get some feedback before committing it to the CD, and at the same time it seemed a shame not to put it in the December song contest. I did make the conscious decision not to bump it up the board once the contest had started, although these days I'm not sure how many of the contest participants spend much time on the song feedback board. Personally I'll take all the feedback I can get, so I'm grateful for the feedback on the contest threads. As for this contest, I thought there were at least 5 or 6 songs which could have won it - daddio, Oswlek, Bee, Scenes, Ironknee in particular, but there were lots of really strong songs in there. Some of the songs at the bottom of the list were way too good to be down there, too. Interesting to see Just Drive getting rave reviews - it didn't click for me, but I tend to think everything Zeek touches turns to gold so I'm going to have to give that another go. Comanche Moon is wonderful and a deserving winner. Huge thanks to Mikey for running this again. You clearly put a lot of time into these contests, so thank you.
  8. Countdown to Christmas Lights on the Christmas tree Logs on the fire Family all on their way Pick up the turkey Bring out the wine Christmas gets closer each day Oh, when will it snow? What will I buy you? Oh, hang mistletoe Stand there beside you Kiss you right there Cos now for another year It's the countdown to Christmas Now they've sold out of turkey We didn't buy cheese And the lights on the tree won't turn on There's nothing on telly God I'm sick of John Cleese And who knows where the kids have gone? Oh, when will it snow? It's raining like crazy I just want to stay home Get drunk and be lazy There's so much to do God knows how we'll ever get through The countdown to Christmas Now it's nearly the time for Santa to come Bring out the carrots and pies Be sure not to open your eyes Tomorrow who knows what you'll find Christmas is here It's time for the stockings Let's see what's inside And now bring out that bottle of wine The kids can't contain themselves Neither can I Let's face it, we love Christmas time Oh, here comes the snow And I love what you bought me Oh, hang mistletoe Close your eyes for me Kiss me again We've made it another year The countdown to Christmas
  9. Tom, Dave, Mike, Thanks very much for the comments. You never know how this kind of thing is going to go down, so I'm pleased and relieved you like it (particularly since I know you all know how to write a tune!). Mike, I'll keep that suggestion in mind when I next pick up the guitar.
  10. Hi Randy Welcome to the Muse! I like the sound of this one - good guitar playing, nice vocals. Reading above, I agree that the drums don't sound quite right panned as they are (I'm listening on headphones) but it should be easily fixed. It grows with repeated listens, too. I'm not sure I understand where the "I'll take you with me when I go" hook comes from, but it sounds good. David
  11. Good tune, Ricky. I like the melody, particularly in the chorus, and I can see why it would come across well live. Being critical: I'd like to hear you raise it a bit in the last chorus - really let loose on the chorus, maybe take the melody upwards or hold the notes a bit towards the end of the lines in the chorus. The bridge also didn't add anything for me. It's not bad, but it's not bringing anything extra either. That said, it's a very enjoyable song as it is.
  12. This is great, Clint. Fantastic sound, heartfelt delivery, nice subtle production. And what a voice. The structure wanders a bit, but I think it works well that way. Feels more like you're making the statement rather than reciting a song. I was a bit unsure about the title - it didn't make sense out of context - but it works in the song. That said, it doesn't actually say anything - I wonder if it might work better if you finished each rendition with a specific reference to doing something 'because I am a Leonard' or similar. On the other hand, 'Ballad of the Leonard' is far more original, so you may prefer it.
  13. I enjoyed this in the contest, Neal - I think it got my highest score along with Len - and I'm enjoying listening to it again. It's absolutely crazy, obviously, but I think you pull it off superbly. Wonderful imagination on those lyrics (although now you tell us it's at least partly true!) and some great guitar work hidden in there. You lost me a bit on the "task" lines, but you can't win them all
  14. I really enjoyed this Mike. I love that type of lead guitar - it just wanders through the song with no apparent purpose other than sounding great. Cool bass, too, and I like the transition into the chorus. Minor points for me - the drums sound a bit busy early on, and the vocals feel slightly rushed in places - "it's easy to decide just to get by" stood out, for example. Really cool sound - I've listened a few times now and it gets better with each listen.
  15. Oops - thanks for pointing it out! Now working.